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Look I'm Surprised At The Poetry Lovers This Was Poetry I Will Repeat This Was Poetry Hey Atticus Needs This Kind Of Stuff But I Don't Think He Has Sense Enough To Appreciate This (it Flowed With No Particualar Attitude) Big Words That Rap Don't Need
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thanks dude even though i didnt even understand what the hell you were sayin
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rap is in first person the writer actually participating and has a attitude listen to this i'll change a little
appear to be shook and surprised as fear looked into my eyes the velocity and thrill caused animosity to bulid even in skies stride down streets collide with clown i defeat to turn the tides haunt creeds and taunt breeds hurt feeling alert by revealing the decadent plateau, with emancipated fears and squealing my plan has devastated years of feelings and got cat kneeling As fear is looked dear, straight in the eye animosity builds with strides of carelessness that collides taunting breeding, Hurtful feelings good-bye Waived on a decadent plateau of emancipated tears and lies |
hey peep this please (http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=231559)
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No one understands what he says
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he's a retarded version of maddrapper...
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See by putting an S at then end of collidies you sentence won't make sense yet if you take it awya your rhymescheme would be diminished. Basicall,y next time you give an example do it right. |
THE BOTTOM VERSSE IS HIS VERSE MY VERSE IS THE TOP ONE SO i'LL SAY WELL DONE FOR MYSELF BUT ITS RAP VS POETRY THE DIFERENCE BETWEEN THE TWO
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dope shit fam. :thumbup:
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WEll thansk for the constructive criticsm. |
Both come well nice, was feeling Tims verse, seemed more complex and
abstract,.. just a really good read. Both verses flowed really well nice use of vocab and good grammer. Dope I would like to colab with both of you if your down. Two bars that I liked,.. were.. Battered dimension, trampled in digression She searches ever more still she is a lost cause even in her reflection ^^^Dopeness^^^ really liked this... Gloves made from quintessences of Satan Drove wild boars in communities of Haitians ^^^this was just dope flow !!! liked it. Stay up both ~ |
thanks FAM and tornado...look RAP iis for txt battlers so stick to it if i wanted to flow i wouldnt put much emotino into it now this is more poetry?!...if so my whyme scheme would be diffrent and poetry doesnt need to rhyme does any of the words rhyme at teh end?!..YES poetry doesnt need to so NO this aint a poetic piece so please leave and thanks for cloggig the thread.
understabd this topical..has its own version of writing with flow and consistancy. poetry is like a mystery to one's eye... so your not comparing RAP vs. POETRY. thanks critic my dude! im down just fill me in on the topics |
RAp is a subsiduary of poetry.
. . Critic if ya wanna colab, holla at silent and discuss the topic and verse line amount hen silent will tell me and we'll get it rollin' |
yeah got a lot of cats think they know it all to me poetry that don't rhyme is only effective writing now break that one down tell me the difference between the two
and like i said about rap and poetry still stands until proven wrong now stop clogging the board trying say i don't know what I'm talking about because I do |
drop the subject
ok uppin this.... |
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