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ight well man it was a cool story...flow might be on depending on your delivery for text its a lil off with the structure but def can be pulled off in audio..story wasnt bad but needs more imagry to grab attention but keep it up
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uppin.......................
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THAT WAS HARD, FLOW WAS CRAZY, I WISH THAT PEOPLE COULD HEAR THAT, LIVE BUT THAT WASUP KEEP UR HEAD UP PIMPIN.....................................http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=231461.........................................
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it was a nice story tell.... pretty good but like fran el. depending on how u flow is how it goes... still i liked it... ur wording could have been better in some places... in others it was good. u could step up ur vocab a bit. but this was pretty decent. no doubt. good shit... i hope to see u improve some fam. check my shit out. the vibe of words...
and ps to P.A. leave better feed numnut! u aint gonna get fined for each word u right.... all ur feed is less then 2 lines... pick that shit up |
it didnt' really paint an image in my head...it was a pretty good though OM though. i enjoyed readin it though, keep it up
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It Waz Okay..... Topicz Were Played.......... Had A Fast Flow It Hit Good A Couple Times............. Keep Spittin And Try To Be Original Or Expand The Whole Thing
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ok no bad i see were you was goin with this one...you had the flow vocabulary and the complexity in each verse but i couldnt see much imagery in the first verse but thats coo cause you came with that in the second verse..i like what you did here it was a nice piece overall.........stay up...~1~.......
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Gay.........................
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yea thats the thing about writin,usually only the one who wrote it knows how to spit it, so i can see this being audio, but as far as story tellin u got that 2 mane. keep doin what u doin
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it wuz coo mayn-liked da story side of it-got a grasp of how kenny was thinkin--
i didnt like the ending of part 2 couldve been better though but it was nice mayn |
I really enjoyed the story fam... It flowed pretty well. It is tough to tell a story and rhyme plus be complex at the same time, as someone said above. Keep em comin homey.
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Ah, I liked the story it was a pretty good read. I was feelin it, could of used a lil more vocab, but flow was okay and structure was nice. But if this was audio like you were sayin, it would be pretty dope, keep it up.
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yeah man, good shit. wanna see part 2
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I liked it man... Had some nice lines in there. I liked most of it keep it up playya
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i give it a 7 cause i think it was good but it could have been better
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