yeah this beat is pretty old. me and some other people made a song to it about a year ago on here.

anyway tony your flow is real choppy. your voice sounds extra robotic. you need to have more energy. lyrics are alright. not super great but not bad

yvonne - you gotten better since the first time i ever heard you. your lyrics are semi-cool. your quality isnt the greatest either.


overall this song was just alright.

yeah this was before I upped my quality a lil bit

god damn i'm so sick of hearing high pitched voice samples, but i won't hold it against you.

Tony, you DEF need to re-record the first verse, AND re mix it AND re EQ it (or EQ it at all from the sounds of it). I can barely hear what you're saying without focusing uberhard to discern words from beats. The lyrics sound soid, just i can't hear em. should EQ your lows for sure and bring some body out of your voice, record at a higher volume then compress your vocals. your adlibs are MEGA quiet i ain't evne realize you had em till your second verse.

yvone, you already know your mic is anus. sounds like I'm listening to a clock radio. You could have repaired a lot of that with some EQing, damn I'm so sick of sayin this. your flow is okay, too repetiive though, part of being a well rounded mc is being able to switch your shit up and still be intersting and entertaining. Your adlibs are so low i can barely tell you have em. mad punchins. the last bar couplet shoulda rhymed "words" and "above" don't rhyme, that's the wrong way to send off a verse.

should have faded the song out instead of letting it abruptly fall out, btw, some dialogoe between the two of you on the instrumental portion would have lended a LOT of intimacy to this track, would have sounded liek we had a window to the relationship that you guys were talking about, not to mention break up that huge gap.

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i forgot about this...



....Thank You Sir

tony green -- wat up, this track is str8 it seems sorta cliche with the first line, but its a koo track flow was koo i liked it but nothing exciting...maybe u eed more emotion? sound like ur meaning wat u tryn to say.

yvonne -- hmm i wont take it ez so imma be real, it was aight at best not to be disrspectful but everything u said is something i heard before just in deifferent words in..other words im tryn to say u should find different way to say thingz and ya need to up ya vocab... ur flow is nice no complaints but i guess its tha same for u add more emotion and add vocab to ur trax u got potential girl the beggining of ur verse u was choppy then u actually started flowin so big upz

both of u can elevate just try harder!!

i aint being an ass im just being real accept it anyway u want.....

fo sho..its useful for one to elevate...



thanx:thumbup:

http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=234428

ayt yvonne i gotta admit since las i saw/talked 2 u,u were a bit new wit the whole rhymin thing but dis track was pretty decent 4 a lovey dovey type song i agreebeat was a lil 2 loud other than dat i guess jus keep practicin til ya feel da mic more feel me good cut overall though keep doin ya thang n tony u did kool jus like yvonne work on ya mic skills n dont b afraid 2 rap wut n how u feel bout a song ayt peace check out my shit aint audio yet but it'll get there