Voted For: Intangible

intangible > desipio

tanj...
you barely pulled this one off bro. i pretty much gave you the win because a couple of your lines were a bit more memorable. your flow was cool, but overall, your verse was generally hit or miss. in the future, try not to self glorify at all in your bars...unless you're able to hit dude with something back in each line...because it could hurt you in the long run. i've lost some of my earlier battles over that shit. lol. also, get rid of the "//" after each line and work on your structure a little bit.

des...
pretty simple drop my man. no hate, but i wasnt really entertained. i can see that you got some potential...but i didnt notice that "eye of the tiger" (hunger) that i dig when peepin' battles. either i want to laugh out loud sometime during the battle...and/or i want to leave the thread with a memorable line burned into my skull. so, work on your flow, sharpen up your punches (you're close) and straighten out that structure of yours.

best line of the battle:
I got the ratchet too, I'm bout to leave this snitches game in a blunder//
Rockin' WNBA Jerseys only time you get a bitches name and number//

keep the front lines alive my fellow battlecats...


...s.v., c.s.

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Voted For: Intangible

I got the ratchet too, I'm bout to leave this snitches game in a blunder//
Rockin' WNBA Jerseys only time you get a bitches name and number//


vs. nothing.

desipio..i felt your verse was very weak, you had no personals..no real apparent punches either...u just kinda went on about how you werent trying...never underestimate your opponent....your rhyming was a bit off i felt some lines you really forced your rhymes...just had a hard timing liking your verse...keep up and try and establish a flow...

intangible..i felt your verse was ok...nothing to special..but you had a better rhyme scheme and set ups for punches than your opponent..all your lines rhymed and even had some multies..which made the flow a little easier to catch..though the way you set up your lines makes it hard to establish the flow...but you had that 1 bar that just stood out from the rest..which is why you get my vote

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