ok.

the flow was off and multies were forced in a lot of places. and yes anyone can get a rhyming dictionary and do that shit. but if you read it it makes perfect sense. its a good message and had excellent content. the rhyme structure wasnt appealing to me. and myk what the fuck are you talking about.? go back to RnR.


"Quit trying to save hip hop and maybe hip hop will save you at the pit stop"


overall nice drop 8.6-10

This had good content and a good plot/message to it but a lot of people were right about the "ion" thing. It gets old quick, 4 lines no more especially when you have many inner rhyming. I liked the piece over all but it had no REAL complexity in words but I give you props on actually coming up with THAT many damn words with "ion" lol... I didn't even know there was that many lol, but for real, that "ion" rhyming will kill a verse. It just... gets old...

pz

everyone thanx for all the comments