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Bash 05-12-03 07:23 PM

Yo i send u a message ,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,Peep it

ALan ALba 05-12-03 08:08 PM

TIGHT! I was feeling it yo!

but hey! you asked for how to make it better
basically, you gotta question yourself.
what seems like the most intimidating thing to do
then just attack it.
but thats just my opinion
besides that,
you should've flipped the baby viewing his future inside the womb
kno?
I dont know, you figure it out.
peace.

caspah 05-12-03 08:13 PM

lol thanx son opinion appreciated never quite got what u meant, but maybe thats just it

Johnny 6-feet 05-12-03 08:16 PM

i think you went over board with multis and vocab and didnt focus enough on the topic at hand.

its obvious you got skills, its just a question of developing them in this case, if you'd spoke more on what your mother means to you it wouldve been stronger. although the multis and vocab wouldve been a great "spitting for the sake of spitting" piece.

keep posting.

caspah 05-12-03 08:22 PM

ye thanx dogg

thats what i was dissapointed in, i was hopin to drop a more felt piece with all tha multis vocab and tough rhyme scheme

thanx for tha opinion, i think i share it with u

Bash 05-12-03 08:23 PM

Caspah ur Message Box is filled , , ,, I can't send u any message

The_one_LogiKal! 05-13-03 09:18 AM

nice multi man. wickd shit i felt it, i b droping an open mic soon so peep in it when i done. peace. and ya wcked shit kept that shit up.

caspah 05-13-03 05:43 PM

thanx man ill peep urs when i see it up


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