Thanx Dawg

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Tight it was deep and had good flow which i really like in an open mic, feelin it really enjoyable and the fact that its true is good
Thanx man you jus' brightened up ma day..

-one love-

^ ^ ^ Deep Shit Dawg Thanx ..

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haha dis shit i can relate to, this is so true like u read my own thoughts is this like your owb experience from the heart? flow n everythin was tight. give this a 9/10 dogg.

Yeh It Is An Experience than Hasn't Ended Yet An I Hope It Never Does!!

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Shiznit's Thoughts:

Its funny how love just spins you around and do all those crazy stuff huh? like you would do everything for love...i always thought that love doesnt exist...its just like a mere reflection of what we just WANT...but for some reason someone made me feel that its way way better than that...but thats not the point..i mean all im sayin is love is really powerful...

*ahem* alright bout the piece...

VOCABULARY

>well written ....interesting use of words....i mean the littlest word that you put in this meant sooo much that it melts my heart...good job!

FLOW

>it fits perfectly ...i liked reading it...i actually read it a couple of times and it quite good to read...

CONTENT

>wow!...i feel the love...im really in that state right now...love themes are usually the good thoughts on how to make a piece like this...nice

these lines reminded me of someone special..'my life' and when i read this...i was like...damn!

"i'm never gonna stop loving her i'll do what i can
now that i've found her i am a complete man"

^^endless, forever, infinity...nice!


"i'd marry her now so she is here to stay
and i love her more and more each day"

^^^now thats The Ending....i loved it

OVER ALL

>amazing!....very nice...deep ish! drop more!

^^^ Good feedback ...
thanx

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yo quik man wot i feel readin this is like what i feel when i hear eminem rap about his daughter, so much love and absolutely serious, good shit dawg

Thanx man ... uppin this!!!

this was tight i like this
had emotion and true
feeling put into it keep spittin
shit likes this......

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