hey shiznit this shit was real im likein yo work n hell yes to audio

hey this is some real shit. I mean i've known several people that committed suicide, and it's nothing nice. if she wont talk to you, talk to her, show her you care. but in other words keep it up ma! And, aye holla at me my beautiful sista!

Quite powerful. Emotions pure.

The simple structure and imagery used to explore was very well used. Getting into the mindset and enviroment.

Though i felt all but the first and last stanzas you should only have used 'mommy' once at the start. But hey, small criticism.

...a very nice and

wow this got me speechless
very well written... really deep
there was a point in my life where I felt the same way about things happening around me... so I can definitely relate to it.

Keep writing shit like this...

peace