^Uppin^

A powerful piece. One that was long, yet kept the reader glued to it.

Structured it fairly well. Thought once or twice it tailed off a BIT, not a lot, but a bit. Also a bit bumpy in way the emotions flowed once or twice. But not really anything to 'write home about' (whatever relevance that has to art/poetry or whateveri dunt know,.but you get the point...)...

...very nice...very nice..

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eh dawg yo written word is too tyte... keep droppin

emotion was felt - nice wordplay

da hunnet son

daaaaaaaaaamn...the emotions from this piece is deeply overwhelming...the finisher was the best..knowing for a fact that somethings are quite unexpected.....

the flow of this poem is smooth...well written...props for this!

nice job! I love it...very strong!

nice 1...used good emotion and nice structure..overall gr8 job

I liked it dawg.... it was very deep and emotional for being
unrela and created in ur dead. props to ya on it...............
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check out mine "sad story" thanks balla
pz

Legend, what do you think.................??

tha shit was deep good wordplay n the content was excelent nice drop keep spittin


respect

damn man that was ill i really felt that 1 i can't wait to hear more of your flowskeep writing...............

it was aiight. u can do better

wow man, deep ill piece
the end was just amazing
keep droppin
luv to read some more shit from ya
sickness

hey..
Great piece here...Incerdible imagery and intriguing story line...Very captivating, and it's always great when you have one concept in your head the whole time you're reading and then the last line comes and changes all of that...

Great piece..
Stay up..