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Alot of views no responses,it's dissapointing.
Peace |
first off...
your bars are waaaay to long, split them in two,.. Your flow hover was off da chain, you amde good use of your knowledge of internals, and you played them out well, well spread out..nice! You had nice wordplay here too, with lines like: "like a flawed diamond i cannot claim to be perfect as you cannot see right through me, times ticking i've been sleeping for years dreams of a rap career are in slow motion/ can i fast forward and pause my devotion or will tha alarm awaken me with just a notion/" you had glittering vocab here dawg, vocabed up! - as usual..lol overall: was dope, only problem... the bar length, shorten it...8/10 |
tight shit dawg, really got into it, thought ya vocab was good, i would maybe hav broken it down into two verses, but hey its your spit
"Yo Duh Dutteih i'm giving rise to a new form of budding environmentally friendly emcees/ biological lyracists who use the sun to photosynthesise thus allowing people to breathe/" specially liked these two lines...aight....peace |
^ yea was thinkin maybe a hook and split it into 2 and slightly extend it,but i don't like spittin hooks myself so if anyone wants they can do a hook for me.
Peace |
Uppis this one more time peeps.
Peace |
One last up.
Peace |
This was a decent drop, i liked ur vocab , and ur message in it was real nice, a good concept , .. u had olso a nice flow, ..., but i have to agree with the other cat, u can better split ur lines, ..cuz they look kinda long, ...but still overall a decent piece
Will u be so kind to hit up my poetry piece?, |
uppin.
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Definatley feelin' your flow West... good vocab an wordplay...
Kepp checkin' a doug!!! You battle? |
yea i battle,jus not for a while coz i never have beef really.
Peace |
Nah, not a beef battle... jus, a challenge!!! U uppin???
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