not too shabby, i liked this piece, it was simple yet kinda complicated, vocab was aiight, structure was aiight, average ryhme scheme, mad emotion felt but dont be tellin tha ladies u love em, puppy love is such a sweet little tennager sight lol...j/j...any way nice piece show it to ya girl shell go gaga if shes got any appreciation for poetry,keep droppin tha hotness.~1~

UPPIN

my eyes are too tired to even focus. I will read this tommorow, my bad.

^^LOL lmao

uppin this dont sleep.....

Good piece dawg, you gettin good at these...
nice piece, nice n deep, and i liked the style.....

Pce out homie

yo Shepster...I'm sexy and you're white...lol