damn :( i suck
this was a great job by you 2
lady had the ill flow and her vocab was top notch
13th... umm.. nothing worth mentioning cause all was great

if you would be so kind
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=84636

Tahnk you for mentioning the fact that i have ill flow and vocab!
I'll check ya stuff out1

Anymore feedback?

I liked Divinity's content and loved disciples wordplay... yall combined nicely... each touching this topic in your own little way... tight drop... and stay away from them haters bringing Drama!!

Thats very good feedback! fa real finally some1 mentions my content! LoL

Every Guy I’ve Been With Was Wack, Infact There Were Just 2 Many Times I ‘ve Been Attacked
Next Day He Had The Nerve To Come Straight To My Face And Say “Baby Gurl I Want You Back”
I Look In Ya Eyes In Despise Knowing That The Truth Is Covered In Lies
I’ve Tried So Hard To Make It Work But He Was A Jerk, Lost Count Of Tries…..
No1 Ever Sticks To Their Word From What I Heard, Blew Ya 1st Chance 2nd And third
Every Time I Went To The Mall I’d Get A Call, Couldn’t Be In Peace While Eating
Always Caught My Eyes On Some1 Cheatin, Then My Close Gurlz Beatin
These Actors Rollz Are Played Out So When Will They Finally Retire?

^Dam that got my attention. Shit was so real it gav me goosebumps. Keep ya up mami, if you need sumone i'm always here =]. Ya flow is smooth and u stayed on topic.


From the beginning it was drama.....i was breeched at birth
abused & cursed,lower than dirt..pops made me eat the earth
truth hurts,from flashbacks of tribulations,trials and pains
bruised brain from rape games, young child carried much shame

^This had my attention and never let go. The flow was off the hook and the reality behind ya words is amazing. Seriously i dunt see no flaw in ya verse. just strictly hip-hop...

Tight as fuck collab, fiending for more.

Thank you, means alot that ur there 4 me!
its nice how u noticed that I stayed on topic and smooth flow!
Yea hThe whole abusive relationship part was i nthe past, now I found true love! hope to see some of ya drops!

~LadyD~

Oh yeah.. my bad for the bad grammar
But thats the part I wanted to stand out! so its good that it stood out 4 u mami305

This was pretty decent. .
overall decent collaboration, both had some really good lines & some decent flow, work on the internals & more multi`s. .

Wack.






































Get off me now!!

Well..the context flowed by Divinity reflected the strong on set theme and scheme of 13th. When doing a collab you cant just get somebody to collab with you just for the heck of it sometimes the chemistry between those people collabing had this connection that would fit like as if it's one.

Divinity's reality check hustled the very hard part of life. Truth about this world makes me sick sometimes and the meaning held by her words simply to show how circumstances question the very sense of living in this earth. Tragedies happen, Nobody's life is perfect but for some reason if you look at somebody's you would realize that your's is not that bad and other's has worse. Good looking at those concepts Divinity.

Okay...on 13th's verse (damn...do i have to say something about it really?)..

..Fine..well all i can see through 13th's verse is garbage. I meant garbage of inner meanings. A whole Pile of it. Wordplay and terminology combined fantastically. It's funny how I can understand 13th's verse so much and other people dont. Maybe because he's my idiot syndromatic brother and merely sometimes i know what's on his mind. CLearly stated that he had been through rough times and believe me you can really call it a drama..like in those soap opera ones or worse. Love the flow of the whole verse, bro. You made me proud! (*pukes*)

Well all i can say is...

























































Fucka Drama!

Shiz Shiz Shiz.....good breakdown.....see....people don't
understand the sibling bickering at times between us two....but
when it comes down to evaluating verses and work done by one
another....we come real and use our intellect to grasp the deep
meaning and imagery of the concepts in the verse. like, take
poetry for an example, that is a field in which my mentally
challenged sister excels in...at times...people can't understand
the knowledge and circumstances in her words that she uses,
because they are not truly on the level of elevation in which she
is....bottomline.......ur such a slut sis....but thanks for the feedback

Damn Jen... I didnt even finish reading ur feedback its longer then the collab! LoL

but thanx

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Deep stuff guys,liked it a lot,it was straight illness to a hard topic.
~Quotes~
EMCEE DIMEZ aka Lady>Turn On The T.V And Tune In The Channel, Looks Like Everybody Plays A Role
Everything Seems Just Like A Drama Series Cuz 2 Much Shitz Gone Out Of Control
F*ck Drama, Screw It I’ve Constantly Been Through It, Too Much People Blew It
Don’t Know How The Hell They Do It, But I Thought I Knew It, Too Much Shit To It
Every Guy I’ve Been With Was Wack, Infact There Were Just 2 Many Times I ‘ve Been Attacked
Next Day He Had The Nerve To Come Straight To My Face And Say “Baby Gurl I Want You Back”
^^Straight illness,it set the mood for the whole verse props
13th>From the beginning it was drama.....i was breeched at birth
abused & cursed,lower than dirt..pops made me eat the earth
truth hurts,from flashbacks of tribulations,trials and pains
bruised brain from rape games, young child carried much shame
never da same,peer pressure & rejection in the process of growth
leg broke,once both,father said he had to teach me approach
^^Good shit.Your a tight topical writter you can express stuff very well..
Overall:8.5/10
Numero Uno~

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