Thanks for the comments....keep them comin

yo i think ur shit was ill dawg,shit was str8 from the heart.thats where the best shit comes from.poetry or flow its all the same to me it becomes what it becomes,anyways i dug it yo it made a lotta sense unlike some of this other junk on here ive been seein people write.yo im out.

Thanks for the comment. I'm gettin mixed opinions on this one!

emotional!! i liked the story and the realness behind it. like someone said up above....you can tell it was just keyed in be-cuz of the format but that shit was tight anywayzz..

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nice piece, once again, you should do something with it man,... ya got some great skills.
Sometimes the flow was off, but ya got it all together and made this a dope piece filled with a lot of emotions. It kept me reading and reading.
Keep yo head up dawg,
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It's personal, so I can't say it was weak... but the vocab needs work an you need to structure your work better

apart from that good peice an keep em' comming.

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that was my fav line of the piece, overall was a descent piece showed emotion throughout as does all real life pieces... flow was off alot in many places probably because you were tryin tow ork out shit in your head and didnt even think about it too much anyways it was a good drop, plz return the fav and reply to my Rules of the Game (link in my sig)
all in all this piece could of been better but the amount of things you covered made it an alright piece

Yo thanks for the comment and I agree bout the flow but it was difficult to link everythin together. Everythin written down is the truth which also made it difficult to write in a way coz it brought up bad memory's but thanks for the comment anyway