That was really good there was a couple of lines that I didn't think flow as well as I would have preffered but it had alot of heart. Can I ask you a personal question you said that the girl had one arm is that a metaphor or truth. any ways that was deep Good one can you check out my Forever My Homie

yup thats for real man..she only got one half of her arm..and one full one...but she still a hotty..uppen this pz

that was a Tight Piece.....i could feel ya in that.......u could of doen a lot betta Jokez LoL.......ill give ya 8/10

aiight Peace Out Kuz

fuck you....that one arm thing wasnt a joke....pz

pretty good kid
structure and flow was nice...liked thta
although some of the follow on internal rhymes seemed a bit forced at times and the word choice was a bit meh
however i liked the content was well written on the whole
some nice imagery
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i agree this was pretty tight, some nice vocab......good structure....nice rhyming......some did seem a little forced but on the whole i liked it....good drop.......Pz

thanks fgee and devo thats apreciated