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why you get mad? cuz you just got defeated? cheer da fuck uP, g0 t0 mcdonaldz n get a happy meal u 9 year old bitchmade punK....
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uppin 4 more votes..........................i think this is #3 ;\........................................
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Structure - J Punches - J Personals - J Vocab - J Multies - Tie Rhyme - J Overall - J Hey explicate, just stretch those lines out a little, aight hommie. Could you return the favor an go vote on the battles in my sig. I would appriciate it, aight hommie. OUT -High Class a.k.a Confusion |
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uppin 4 votes............................................. ................................................nu mbah five......................................... c0me 0n people only takes 2 more votes then i get a KO :P..............numbah five last UP i got............
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yo came 2 drop a link doggs hit it up ill be back
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ehhhhhhhhhhh, why you postin in this dawg?... you gotta up ya own thread...unless u already upped it 5 timez ;\
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dogg, you start shit on the intahnet, cause in real life ya phoney,
y0u start " beef " cause your jus full of " balogne ", Liked it good wordplay y0u d0nt kn0w me, but will probably come at me with false accusations, the time your waistin, i'm "siccer " then an aids patient, first line too stretched 2nd played n0 matter what happenz im alwayz g0nna be numbah 0ne, y0u shouldn't even battle, jus make like forest gump and run lil stretch but its all good run forest run, run forest run, retreat!, you stepped into this ball game but you can't take the heat Ball game and heat don't go together both lines were wak, in my heart i kn0w, i never evah get beat, 2 u this battle is un-pleasent only g00d muthahfuckin " rapping " you do is on christmas presents, 1st lines a little forced 2nd wordplay so ok y0u never bet me but yet you bet me you could serve me, y0u'z a perpatraitor, y0u coulndn't fuckin " serve me " if y0u waz my waiter, Again wak 1st line ok but played wordplay on tha bottom i'm becomin even greater, y0ur just gettin badder, hearin mah rhymez and pissin ya pants like u g0tz a problem witcha bladder Badder? WTF thats the definition of forced 2nd ine okish this chitter chatter on the net needz 2 stop, its ridiculous, this guy turned gay after this battle 0uta n0whwere, n0stradomous couln't have predicted this Stretched first line bout chitter chatter doesn't relate Elevation needed Explict applyin pressure, You bout to get out classed well beyond measure, 1st too short makes 2nd sound stretched To infest you with pain, thats my pleasure, I drop 2nd cause this performance is impossible to follow, 1st ok but infest you wit' pleasure? 2nd stretched Swallow back, Matter a fact, Heres a gat, Nigga swallow that, Lame but good flow would be sound phat in audion Leave ya ass with a hollow back, Nice imagery When you get hit with government issue, Official pistols, k Exposing ya brain tissue When they kiss you, Sounds wak but k a multi Leaving more then a hickey, The situations bout to get bloody way beyond sticky, Ok i suppose but your multis although present are lame You bout to leave your draws all shitty, Explict so focused, I eat threw JaYDeE like a swarm of African locus, It's fine but I eat threw ya like a swarm of African locus, woulda flowed better Run but you can't hide, the long arm of the 3-8th a reach ya, Disfigure ya facial feature, Facial features but k nice to see multis If aggravated Explict transform's into a creature, Then you can get a glance of a beast that beat ya, When I feast on ya flesh, Turn your whole family a mess, Sounds corny Theres no escape, just ain't safe, Explict opening ya face, Like an unlocked safe, Weak ass similie good multi Explicit gets it I'm afraid technically better Please hit this up as I spent a long time to give you both a good break down of what I think The rules say you gotta use this rhyme scheme so copy an paste it easy! Rhymes Wordplay Multis Metas Punches Personals Opener Finisher Enjoyment http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=94835 |
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forget that what i wrote.... i didn't read it rah, more or less me not reading all of ya post, i'll check it out and vote on it in a bit.. |
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yo
i like the part when explict said "I drop 2nd cause this performance is impossible to follow, Swallow back, Matter a fact, Heres a gat, Nigga swallow that, Leave ya ass with a hollow back, " and if i could vote i will give it tpo Explict |
aiigh cool.. but dont freepost nigga.. if youd dont have over 100 posts then dont vote in any of my fucking battles.. dammit..i hate it when yall do that shit
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Lol wow this was so fuckin weak.
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aiight dawg.. yea i know this was probably the most weakes
verse that i have ever writen...see i really didnt know what to expect from jaydee but since he was new theres was only one thing to expect so i came week.. well see this is what happends.. PZ |
uppin (2)..this battle cant be slept on
i cant battle till this one is closed...ya know cant have more than 2 battles open..................... PZ |
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