dude man post in here 3 open mics which u have replied to or your thread will be deleted.

and for a breakdown, flow was there but some of your multi's seemed a little forced and like someone already said (to lazy to check who it was) try to rhyme your transitions, u had some good wordplay and some alright vocab and some imagery but I thought your structure was kinda wack, I had to rethink my reading over a few times to get the flow goin in my head but keep elevatin bro. peace.

hit up my open mic called "Freedom" if u got the time bro. thanx in advance. peace.

naw dog u have absolutly no reason what you are talking about..my structure might not be as good but its not "wack" as u say!!..i was telling a story if you actually read it..and know a little something about rap..you would know its not all about the flow..