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shits tight holmes... Its easy to feel cause I been through the same type of shit with my ex recently... Im sure most everyone here has...

"And I miss, me and you together always, us...
But lust, broke the trust so now the friendship is crushed..."
illness man...

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that was a great read, i liked the vocab becuz it would be easier to say on an audio..i think...the emotion was great you had a lot of good emotions and thoughts in this,....keep it up pz

Thanks dawg......up

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I thought this was tight to man fo real ..........I liked all the fuckin like well like you put youre heart into it thats all dat matters and I liked the accual flow to ...............I think the only thing wrong was some spelling.keep it up

Somebody point out the spellin mistakes for me^^

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tight..very happy to see this..made me think a lil...good vocab..flow was pretty good...8/10..

good job dawg..

Peace

son, youve uped this thread 13th times

.....let go

Aight yo here we go....
I ain't gonna be an asshole so don't take this wrong, the verses and all was ill, but your structure needs work, you used multies good here and there but you need to come with more to doctor the flow when you gotstra stretch them bars...Multies and internals will fix that. Also yer verses were way to short, that would make a minute and a half audio if you were lucky, you never know how much of a difference it makes till you spit it, but even if you spit to a slow beat your still gonna come out with a short song beacause of you structure and it looks a lot longer than it sounds, trust me, I have a mixtape out and the first song I did I was like WOW! 32 bars is only like 45 seconds? WTF? you know what I'm sayin? anyway, just make your verses twice as long and it'l be ill, I think, and those internals and multis I talked about...ppeace yo, keep up the good work