if you dont get it.. dont bother to vote
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.. At Sight ..

When Eyes Attract.. Streams Of Life..
If You Have Cataracts.. Mis-Lead Your Sight..
Physicality Equal.. Ambition Removed..
His Morality's Sequal.. Decsions Improve..
See What You Sought.. End Togetherness..
Find Yourself Caught.. Friends w/ Benefits..
Burn Shoulder To Shoulder.. Pride Reminded..
Until You Turn Over.. Blind-Sided..

.. That Which Hides ..

You Try To Express.. Feelings Inside..
Then You Try To Regress.. Appeal That You Hide..
Cant Grasp What You Dream.. What Affection Thinks..
For The Realizm That Brings.. Complexities..
You Dont Feel Its Right.. You Bleed What Your Needing..
If You Cant Catch The Sight.. You Fail To See The Inner Meaning..
The Harder The Struggle.. Nothing Real To Say..
The Larger The Trouble.. Because You Cant Feel That Way..
You Enjoyed The Time.. But She Disagreed..
She Wanted More This Time.. But Love Not Guarenteed..
You Tried To Improve.. But Pushed Away..
So Whats The Use.. If You Cant Feel That Way?..
A Heart Discouraged.. Lived Infailably..
Emotion That Worsened.. Only The Physicality..
His Passion A Mess.. What He Wont Forget..
The Feelings He Left.. Un-Expressed..
He Tried To Love.. That Was A Given..
Did None Of The Above.. His Emotion Hidden..

.. Finding What Was Never Lost ..

He Would Search His Hope.. Wheres The 'A' To His 'Q'?..
The Answers Nope.. For The Things He Wish That He Knew..
He Was Piled Alone.. Soft In His Spot..
Heard The Dial Tone.. More Often Than Not..
Wished It Would Ring.. Cuz He Wouldn't Call..
Til He Heard Something.. He Wished He Didn't Hear At All..
There Was An Accident.. Fatality Of A Woman..
He Laughed At It.. n' Knew That It Couldn't..
Until He Heard The Name.. Wasn't The Finest..
n' The Time Remained.. Nothing But Silence..
He Remembered The Face.. n' Desired The Source..
He Wasn't In Standard Pace.. Over The Corpse..
Thought Over It Twice.. But The Hurt Stayed..
And What He Would Find.. Wasn't Lost In The First Place..


How Sad Is It.. For The Life That He Prayed..
That he Wasn't Emotionally inAdequate.. Just Delayed..
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Synopsis (just in case you didn't get it: He was dating this
gurl, and the physicality of it all was cool, but thats not what
she desired. She wanted a relationship, but he could do it. He
tried, but couldn't fufill her every need. So they broke up, yet
still were chasing their feelings. He sat by the phone and hoped
that she would call, cuz he was too afraid to call himself. Only
when the phone ran, it wasn't her. It was the cops, who told
him that she had died. After her death.. he realized that he truley
loved her all along.. just didn't know how to express it

GOTDAMN...
Ya just had to make my life all the harder. Nice fucking battle to both of you. But when it comes to overall better verse, Auspicious came up with this one. He had a story which I was feeling, and a way more creative way of showing it. MM you did great, but Auspicious held it off.

damn...a nice short piece by MM
shit was ight... nothing great.. i think you shoulda...
put more into it...being it was fo chip...
but.. overall.. good imagry on the topic...
eh...well... ya....

Aus... your awesome...lol.. i loved it...
it seems u just put more into your shit here...
the whole thing went good.. way to hit it...
flow was on point... i like ya scheme...
way to lay it down


vote-aus

Oh Man Aus. Youve really came along since ive last read some of your stuff..


M~M- Honestly, I know that you are well capable of a much better peice than what you posted. But it seemed to me as if you just gave up on the topic and didnt put your whole effort into it. Plus, the length left much to be desired.


Aus- You concept was semi-played, and death seems to be in every other story. However, i feel as if the way in which you told it was magnificent. The 'What he found was never lost' line just put it over the edge.


Good job fellas.


vote-Aus

wurd, I do conceid and Aus wins

3-0 KO, lol
lets get on with
next week so I can
start tryin to get
back here again

Werd.. G' Battle MM
Respect

^very admirable.


Good man.


(m~m)

yeah....admirable..., but mm....your gonna have to wait, becuz i'm comin back for my title, lol, good battle, nyce win aus.................mm vote on my battle, stay real, peace, 1

p.s. this is not a vote....just incase some one tryes pullin that bs that i didnt explain myself

nice battle

aus wins