I liked your content... you had some nice wordplay,
your rhyme scheme was really nice... and I liked the
format of this peice in whole... it was a very nice read,...
you rarely get those any more....

Rule,
Im rebuilding the OMENS... I need ill heads in there that
are active... you were one of the only ill cats that was active,...
and if you want to get back wit the OMENS... there is a
co-leader spot waitin for ya...
Im still recruiting members... its takin awhile cuz I only want
ill heads in the Omens.... the crew went to shit after we let
so many newbies in... so I dont want to make that mistake again,
hit me up in the tryout thread and just state whether your in or out dawg...
~AshY~

i'll tlak to deacon and see if i can co leader it...and stay in soft focus...if not i'm just staying in soft focus...thanks for the critique though

You always doing an incredable job with imagery... It had a consistant flow, used the vocab well, and the rhyme scheme was pretty good as well. I have seen better of you, thats the only downfall on this piece, but not that big of a fall. Nice drop hommie, you always surprizing me... 8.5/10

OUT

-High Class a.k.a Confusion