Fuck u Relik, i aint biting, i think ur biting, ur teeth marks match tha imprints on ya moms dick

it was jus a lil task i did fo myself aight, seein if i cud do a remix next step is my own song aight. but yea i shud do my own shit, but hey guess wut that was my own shit.

Rule No. 1 - Don't ever make a remix of some one else's song, well atleast in text.. Well I take that back, You don't ever do a remix to some one else's song.. I wasn't really feelin this man, I'm sure you'll get better soon though jus keep elevating.. so keep your head up

all i read was blah blah blah

you are an imature herb by what i can tell of your personality in your rsponces...clown....but this song was alright I just think you need to hink up your own stuff it sounds better because it's priginal and people don't compare it to artists on mainstreem lol...but take the advice it actually helps dont get affended.....for real

my 2 cents pz

thanx man, i am gon write my own song, i jus felt i had to start sum where, i listen to all tha comments but some are jus hate comments. apprciated dawg

pz

wack - this kid doesnt take replys at all
i bet if they said all 'sick/ill' 'no shit i am a thug'
but if they say wack he cries..
wack

its ur opinion and i will take it how i want it. but thanx for tha tip dawg.

Yo, dawg, don' piss off tha modz...don' want ya ta get banned when ya jus' joined X.L.G...

All this hatin'..This man's tryin' to get better..All you people with negative comments without critique \( A vast majority)..Should recheck your egos..Because half of you probably couldn't do half as good...Anyways.

For the piece....I agree, format was off..It went t the beat kind of..Just not near as skillfull...IMO..But keep trying...This is a good start..Remix's are a good way to test your talent..Gives you a topic someone else has already covered, also a chance to review what they wrote for an example..Much easier than a free-based idea but good for rap consoul...Keep tryin', i'll be lookin''...

6/10

1ne

I Don't really Like it when People Re Write Other songs ya Coulder Did Ya Own Open Mic.......ya structure was alright i think ya could use some work on that Bit......Ya Worked It well In some bits If.......ya Flow was Good not much To it...Your Vocab wasn't great too simple.......all and all Keep it Dropin Kuz.....Peace (v)

alrite i'll take all this into consideration yo'z thanx for tha better tips, it all makes me a iller emcee

pz

Yo ima give you some advice this forum open mic is for critism if you don't want critism you need to post in poetical scriptures. this pz was wack i wasn't feelin it. You talk about fucking grade school in somethin that was about comin off the block with the only thing going for you is a wicked free flow and over coming fucking stage fright. so the next time some one gives you critism take it because everyone needs to elevate i know i do and others ill admit the same thing. you need to calm ur 17 yr old ass down u erd pz