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Voted For: Verbal Abuse

this was a very very very good/close battle..........you both captured the topic very well........both had very nice stories........both had good vocab, flow, emotion, imagry and creativity

spek-aight you had a nice verse ot had lots of emoiton and imagry in it......your structure was good........you had very good vocab and it was put places where its needed some ppl just use em places for the hell if it.........but you had a very very good story as well.....and you had a really consistant flow....also good creativeness

VA-you had awesome vocab on this topic...............you incorporated a lot of emotion and some imagry in your vere.......you captured the topic really well......your structure was ur biggest flaw...........you had a good flow and you had good creativity for the topic as well.....

i liked this topic a lot you both def did a good job.....

topic-both
creativity-both
vocab-VA
structure-Spek
flow-VA but Spek wasnt far behind
emotion-VA
imagry-Spek

v/VA

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Voted For: Verbal Abuse

wow. this was a great battle all together.. by both
wooah.. the structure by both was near perfect.
the flow by both was constent the whole time.
the creativity/imagery was great

Its strange how I can't scream, cause my mouth has been sewn shut
The rest of my body remains broken, burnt and badly cut
But then something happened, that was worse than all the rest
My ribs started breaking, and then open went my chest

that right there had mad imagery.

your lives are lived a martyr. these days, ppl pop pills like suicide is health.
if it was that popular back then, jesus would have crucified himself.

that right there was tight to me..

To me V.A took this by a hair.
this was a great battle.

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Voted For: Verbal Abuse

this one was hard to grade but I have to go with verbal on this one
flow verbal
hits verbal
multis verbal
vocab verbal
you're structure was iight and all but just keep elevating on it and you will be fine. But verbal gots this one becuase his lyrics flowed with my more and I felt his hits more.

over all verbal
and hey hit up on my link please peace.

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Voted For: Spektikul

This battle is very close, hard to decide so lemme give you the breakdown

Spektikul: vocab wasn't too complicated, could've used a bit more complexness but i think that just would've ruined your verse because it was so readable now. Had very strong emotion to it, you could feel the struggle that person was going through,the pain, the fear...Structure and flow were nice, solid drop man! Nice job!

Verbal Abuse: you got me focussed throughout the whole read so props to you for that...vocab,structure n flow were tight! Emotion was there, was really feeling things you were saying but i felt Spektikul had a deeper storyline, more from the core...You kinda approached it in a more global distant way in my opinion, it was nice but my vote goes to Spektikul, no hate...was hard to decide!

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Voted For: Spektikul

Emotion: This i give to Spektikul... You had really good emotion here.. Nice and strong... It really drew me in the more i redthe more i kept wanting to read the piece over and over... Very good emotion

Imagery: Again im going to have to give this to Spektikul... Your imagery here was very well portraid... This pieces imager was good and it painted a vivid picture in my mind and thats always a puls

Vocabulary: This i give to Verbal Abuse... I am told that i have some of the best vocab on these 2 sites and your vocab was really amazing... i mean it wasnt really complex or anything like that but it was best outa the two verses and it was very good...

Creativity: Spektikul takes this catagory aswell... Your story really drew me in as i read and was verry original... i didnt really like the approach you took with your piece Verbal...



vote: Spektikul for the above reasons and having 3 outa the 4 catagories... Very good pieces the both of you... makes me wanna get back into writing topicals

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Voted For: Spektikul

i read this battle last night but didn't vote on it..
you had so much vocab it made it hard to picture what was going on.. you flow was fine, but in topicals the flow is not the main portion, you have to get your point across by using imagery... however one part that stood out was this part:
your lives are lived a martyr. these days, ppl pop pills like suicide is health.
if it was that popular back then, jesus would have crucified himself.
dont you get it? he sacrificed his son in hopes of wisdom for the patient.
to live in holy places, thats why he was risen from his placement.
^^that was the best lines in yours.. but i felt like you went from describing a "deeper hell" then jumped right to, what's happening to this world compared to what could have happened if we thought the same way who do now, back then... you have to stay on topic to make it easier to follow through and it's best if you don't SAY what YOU want, you better off just describing the situation and pointing out the best and worst of things... just don't be opinionated... because it shows..

spektikul.. i was feeling these lines:
I never knew it hurt, but the acid from the rain
Started burning in my skin, and flowing through my veins
The pain was too intense, so I ran where I could hide
From the rain that was spurning, while im buring from inside

I tried to take shelter, as my body started shaking
When the sky filled with fire, and the earth started quaking
^^^these lines were full of images i was really feeling this.. and i was feeling the way you stuck to the topic.. flow was nice i must say.. you had a better connection with the reader with your verse.. and your imagery was pretty good..

kinda one-sided.. verbal i seen you write SO much better, but i feel Spektikul took this battle..

v/Spektikul