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Deep. Flow was way better than mines. Shit this was dope. 10/10. I liked all the lines. We should hurry wif dat collab. Alot of dope drops are being made.Peace.....:D
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oh yea huh lol, my bad
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Better hurry wif dat shit. Hey dawg return Da Favor.
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what's the favor??
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My sig nigka. My sig. Peep da shit in my sig and vote on my battle. :D
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im done!! now wut?????
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pretty good shit :thumbup:
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yeah dat was some tite shit fam...nice wordplay..Good Flow..That shit was deep as fuck..It all went together overall i would give it a 8/10.......nice job homeboi
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In my Lex, saw flashing candles “son need ID and registration
situation you going a nifty fifty in a residential location” Felt like Rodney King this is a godly thing potential devastation Have crazy ideas got bats in my brain, as my stats flame juvenile True pile of crap had Mike Tyson fate he checked my license plate awhile Discover nickel and dime clowns rhymes cover grounds like water Wash reefs and march brief like soldiers got ammo like Rambo to slaughter Order fried rice denied twice by Chinese restaurants but got some delivered Shivered held hot sick chopsticks squirt hot sauce plot boss even makes cooks quiver Got a few dense brothers live at the expense of others dang robbers Sick and corrupt “all right stick em up want hard earned money from jobbers” |
cool ish here...emotion seen.....imagery very nice.....
thats a cool bonus.....flow was great as well... *nods* d.a. |
Thanx man, uppin for more feedback
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Please leave some more postitive feedback fam's :(
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that was very good in the beginning great multies but then you started to fall off but it was still good 9.3/10
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hmm uppin......
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yea this is an old OM but can someone new read it? lol
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yo yo this piece was tight,,,,
from beginin ta end caught my attenction i read i twice keep that up an if ya feel up to it we can collab sometime ive been off line for a few days been mixing it up in my studio but i gotta bit to spit im a lay a few down for ya all in open mic...................CB83 HOLLA? |
Thanks for getting me all scared to go to bed now! Meanie! The imagery was amazing, I could really picture those dreams inside my mind (and I fear I'll have similar ones tonight). The vocabulary you used was impeccable, adapted to the content of the piece and had a good balance between basic and complex. You managed to portray the sense of confusion and the struggle the person's going through. You let the readers get into his mind which I definately liked.Had your flow on lock and the structure was good. I absolutely love your writing style, dopeness!
Lmao @ you upping this old shit btw... DQ |
lol no problem.. and thanx ya.. more feed will be very appreciated
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more feedback plz...
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up up and awaaaaaaaaaaaay
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Damn... That shit is str8 up fire, man... Awesome flow...Vocab is really good...Metaphors all over the place in this piece...Strusture was good... Easily 10/10...And you should be voted best open mic... Lyrikally no one has done anthing better that ive seen... good shit... ~1~
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hahaha thanx man...
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The structure was great the vocab you used was nice i enjoyed this peice cause you wrote on a deep subject. heard good reviews about you, im looking at your previous work and i think you have skills.
please return the fav. http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=183663 http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=183659 |
thanx man.. uppin for more feed
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niiiiiice, very deep and didn't go off topic... i like your style too.. like that last line too, but this was very consistent... but um considering your record is 0-38... that was good... lol idk what that whole record thing is all about but it was hott... rtf
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lol.. the records fake lol.. but thanks yo.. uppin for more positive feed.
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closed no link..if you want this re-opend pm me a link
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shyt.. i hate it wen ppl close this shyt.. w/e.. uppin
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Wow that was hot. The multi's and vocab were a very big PLUS for you in this short piece. The imagery was amazing. the storyline was in depth and very realistic. I think the length was very appropriate for the topic. Short, sweet, to the point, but very complex. Good job Dab....8.5/10 |
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