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Voted For: final
Close battle... I didn't really like the topic, but O well... Final... Your shit started off really hot... Good emotion and word choice... I saw more potential for this verse if it could have been longer... I didn't really like how you ended it, with her poppin you wit a gun or whatever... But the beggining was real hot... 7/10-9/10 if you fixed the ending though... Conclusion... I read the first line and thought you were going to come whack as fuck... I mean... Inserted The Newly Cut Key's For My New Crib Into The Keyhole. Not really topical style... After that first line you picked up though... A Emotional Scar Imbedded My Memory & Stained My Girl's Trust. All My Feeling's For Her Were Banished,Love, Passion, & Lust. I felt that that was your best bar... I don't like how you ended it either... Both of you need to work on your endings for sure... v/final... |
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aight thanks for the explained vote anx...
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^^my bad I have been uppin dawg well bumpin this thread
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^^my bad wrong thread lol hahahahahhahaahaha.......
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Voted For: Conclusion
dam when I started reading it, it was as if I was there lol. But good topic I have to give him this one becuase I could follow his flow better and his structure was good his imagry was awesome and his vocab strucutre was good also. Hit up on my battles just search me up peace. |
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Voted For: final
Vote: final Conclusion: It was pretty good, dope if it was freestyle, nice vocabularily..........kind of rpedictable ending though final: voted for you because of the twists...first u wrote as if u were writin form the grave...then I thought k he gon axe the ho but the n she killed u ...dome cool twists but u were tied in other categories with conclusion RTF |
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Voted For: final
Conclusion: not bad i actually like your verse alot even tho the topic is played out n shit it was a tight verse you were creative and emotional...straight good...and pretty much mostly every guy can realate to this topic...and your vocab was tight and you were creat very well with wordplay and metaphores very witty..but i jsut tink you didnt come as hard as fianl did...no hate Final: damn you really elevating topicaly your probably better then me...your vocab was ery good and you worked very emtional in your verse...2nd of all you were also creative with the metaphores and wordplay i seen a few nice lines speically your opener very nice opener...you got this tho...very close battle hard choice...no hate to both pz... |
^aight thanks for votin...shit been slept on so long already lol uppin...
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