thanks i kinda wanted more of better feed..but i guess you cant expect much from newbies but yea my big brother james jeez hes a nerd str8 up...and then i have a lil brother but yea this is str8 true...
uppin

that link u have is boreder-line.....

plez try to get a little more in detail, like what was the best part and what was the weakest u know.....

this aint ya warning this is just ya heads up.... befor the warning...

fuck you.....intensify effect..

i put that link there a long time ago...im not doin it again so shut up...

uppin..

wow man..you're improving at an alarming rate..
your flow,vocab,and multis also..I actually enjoyed this very much..
the true story means you're writing from the heart..
this almost seems like Luther Vandros song "Dance with my father"
but alot less gay, I loved how you expressed your feelings
without sounding like a strait dumbass or soft cake..good job
I think raings are pointless now,I stopped using them
since your last crit

thanks...much appruciated
uppin...

i think dis was a good drop i like da structure yo vocab decent verse

thanks.....uppin

ight.....uppin..

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this shit was hot i can relate to how you feel me parents like that dis the was good as a bitch man ill like you structure and the concept of the verse really got me into it i gotta check out more of your stuff

word thanks....

word.....much appreciated....but shit i have way more better shit den this...

uppin...........

shit was straight, on point, vocab was bout a 7/10. i like the true story aspect i give that a 9/10 so overall i'd have to give you a 8/10 keep shit real

word thanks.......uppin

this definatly has a good flow and carried through-out the verse...vocab was pretty nice and lyrics were also aight overall...but nice shit all around, i was feelin it
keep droppin ~1~

Man this was garbage. All you did was tell a boring story with a few big words. Flow was offffffffffffff. Emotion wasn't there, you don't use words like "Whack" when you're trying to be real. Did I already say how bad the flow was? Horrible. Dont center your shit cuz it fucks up the reading abilities, I don't care how pretty it looks. You gotta get more fuckin creative and get deeper into the lyrics, cuz this was TRASH.

3/10

^tru......but this was one of my wack ones..ive started to use metas in my lines more now..and i also rushed this too...but socrates you couldnt do any better;)...upin

Don't be hatin, my shit has been madd iller than this, uppin for you since you didn't talk shit :)

yo ima return the favor since you dropped on mine...
this has a real good flow..i mean a fuckin sickkkk flow (you should definatly do audios)
lyrics are on point also, im feelin the deep shit
nice vocab, emotion is kinda there also
overall this is a dope drop
keep droppin ~1~

thanks ya i am doing audios...but anyway uppin

uppin..........