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d.j em sce has ACCEPTED this battle on 01-10-05 04:28 AM.
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Voted For: FlOw InTeLLiGeNt

yo, foreal I thought both of these were real good peices... Flows - well it Flowed real well- I love the way you ended- real strong... every line coincided with the next, no blockiness or trouble reading-- everything i'd expect...
DJ's- you could tell you were really feelin what you wrote cuz it was real to you, but it seemed like you had a little more trouble finding a way to make it all fit into this peice and keep the bolded side correct... and for that I think the entire peice kind of suffered, but it does make a very nice gesture... good shit both- but vote Flow.

Voted For: FlOw InTeLLiGeNt

im gonna have 2 give this one 2 flow

i liked dj with the letters and shit
that was some tight shit righ there
yours lines were kinda stretched a lil
you tried 2 fit 2 many words into ya lines
kinda like how i did wit my 1st topical
one of the reasons im loseing lol
but um overall it was a deep poem

but ima go wit flow
for a better flow and more direct
righ 2 the point and more of a direct
type of letter..nice wordplay
and good emotion...good concepts
and nice way 2 put em 2 words

nice battle

*Nuff Said*

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d.j em sce 2 40.00%
FlOw InTeLLiGeNt 3 60.00%

Voted For: d.j em sce

I'm going for d.j here.
dj- You had a nice deep piece, more complex and the structure was on point. Nice vocab not over done, and it flowed well.

flow-Nice piece, but too simple to me, good use of vocab and you told the story well. structure was good and appealing. But d.j. just had the edge.

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alright my name is SEAN and her name is SHEA
(pronounced..SHAY)
we broke up and now we are back together forever....


Sean and Shea forever

Sentimental thoughts keep me reminiscing on the day we first met
Every thought attacked my emotions, but still I try not to forget
As our eyes locked I would soon believe in love at first sight
Not knowing my heart would be broken, I kept your smile bright

Approaching a new level in a relationship, it hurt once “WE” became no more
Now that the truth was spoken I was wounded in a way I had never felt before
Despite the demise to my first real relationship, you still are the one I adore

Sensations would almost immediately grow stronger day after day
However, I would hide my love but every night I would pray after Shea
Exiled from my own passion, I would shed tears before I would sleep
Awaiting a phone call that would guarantee Shea’s affection to keep

Formulating a love that will last forever, I set my soul for this mission
Obstacles lie ahead, but our love shall stop, as I await shea’s decision
Reasonable doubt lingers on, as the question remains in her mind
Extreme measures dwell in my midst, but love has left me blind,
Visions of eternal love wonder in a maze, so this I must confess
Ever since the first day, I did nothing for you but try my best
Real love is what we now have, Shea I thank you for saying yes



my SIG is not part of this poem but i wrote it just write now...it goes with this poem but if i added it i would exceed the number of lines i can use....


PS I LOVE MY GIRLFREIND
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Voted For: d.j em sce

Aight, this was a pretty dope battle
First things first, DJ, The whole scheme an creativity of ya Topic, was creative as hell, using your name an hers forever, an makin it all fit into place with the lines, thats dope, loved it, 9/10 for creativity an you kinda got my vote for that...

Flow, cause DJ's topical was somthin diffrent, he gets my vote, but you came hard, stayed on topic throughout, right on point for the mosy part, just wasnt as creative, so my vote goes too DJ, sorry homeboy

Both were deep an meaningful, but As i said many a times, DJ was a little more creative with his peice, so he gets my vote
No hate an try an return the favor Vs spektikul, only battle i got open lol,

Good lookin out y'all

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Voted For: d.j em sce

Good Battle..............

Dj Emsce Had More Emotion And A Better Visual Of Thea Relationship He Had Some Decent Vocab His Strukture Wass A Lil Off But He Pulled Off Tha Win Bcus He Put More Effort Into Thiss Piece................


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Voted For: FlOw InTeLLiGeNt

Creativitie came well. Dope shit. Nice emotion. Good vocab... nice structure and approach with the letters thing. But yo, it didnt seem to me like it was a "poem to the love of your life" ... It was at the start but it kinda drifted off.

Flow's seemed more "poem to the love of your life"-ish. Thats basically what I had to make my decision on, because both verses were at the same level in terms of flow/emotion/structure/vocab and all that kinda thing. intel's just came across more as addressing the love of his life. And this was a topical.

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Voted For: d.j em sce

oh shit. DJ took this one to me. big time. wayy more creativitie. better flow to his verse, and better structure.
DJ-i was really feeling yo verse. Creative and hard hitting. I feel into yo verse from tha begginin to tha end. real talk. cant realy think of ANythin in this one where i was fallin alseep, or wasnt feelin. flawless to me.
FI-yo verse was nice, but for some reason, i couldnt get into yo verse. It didnt seem interesting to me. yo flow was kinda off, and yo rhymin were kinda predictable. but no hate. I felt like you did yo thang, and u tried. good strcture to your verse BTW.
overall-DJ took this one in my book. more creativness and better flow to his verse and more interesting.

v/DJ

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