Voted For: MC Firetruck

Mc firetruck prolly could be the fireman of the fire hall
But who cares if he prefers hose on trucks den on a doll
^^DECENT OPENER, GOT A CHUCKLE
U no mc, u on the wrong degree, cuz u only in grade one
Don’t u get more dizzy den microwaves spinin den a gun
^^WASNT FEELING THIS PUNCH
U aint Extraordinary, so stop thinkin ur the village chef
I don’t care bout ur belief, if ur Christian, ill bite the beef
^^DECENT,..GOOD FLOW,NOT HARD HITTING THOUGH
Whats wit the prophecy, watch as I add L’s to ur technique
My punch will make ur eye turn blue to match the skys peak
^^WASNT FEELING THIS
Possibly u might have wisdom, claiming to be an old man
I’ll put holes to ur winnin streak as I rewrite ur verses plan
^^NO PUNCH..WEAK CLOSER..
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overall ya verse was bout average, i didnt see much other then your opener that caught my eye...your punches just werent connecting..you started decent but ya verse fell off
the rest the way through ..........pz

You are who you associate with, so stay out my vicinity
'Cuz I'm not usually on that bitch shit, but my verse is about Affinity
^^THIS OPENER WAS A FLIPPED CONCEPT FROM B4..LOL,NAH
WASNT REALLY FEELING IT CUZ OF THAT..SRRY
Are you kiddin' me? Does this herb know the meaning of that phrase?
Oh well, he also thought Parallel meant "going seperate ways"
^^THIS WAS NICE...
An affinity's an obsession, and I'll explain the definition
"His affinity for dickriders won him our last competition"
^^OK,....DECENT
You don't believe me? I'll get the link, we'll see who be iller
'Cuz for real, you're whacker than a motorized weed killer
^^AGAIN, THIS WAS DECENT
That's it, you're gettin' smoked, I'm the boy with the cig
And the only buzz you got in hip hop, is that toy in your sig
^^GOOD CLOSER
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overall bar for bar this verse hads stronger punches and was more consistent..nothin to special, but i was definately feeling ya concepts more so than the other verse.......
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affinity..work on ya punches...
mc...t,..try not to flip ya old concepts.......pz

Voted For: MC Firetruck

mc got this one...the battle WAS kinda close thoguh

affinity-my favorite line was the 2nd one...i liked some of your punches but the majority of them didnt hit hard enuff and were all plays on hsi name...the structure was nice thoguh,and good flow...coodve had more multies....i also wasnt feeling the opener or closer...

mcfiretruck-loved the closer, the flow was alright, good punches, nice werdplay too...the only things needing improvement were multies, and vocab....i liked this verse

overall-

opener-MC
closer-MC
flow-A
vocab-A
puncehs-MC

i actually thoguh this was a nice battle

v/mc firetruck

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I be uppin' dis, yo. Time for me to beat BitchFace here lmao:laugh:

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Voted For: MC Firetruck

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