Aiight I'ma keep this short and sweet cause I've had a long night..

Shit was dope bro.. I can tell you put a lot of effort into this peice and you got some points in it where I didnt understand what you were saying.. Patty Duncan... Whos that? And there were other parts I didnt understand aswell, but I aint gonna bother getting em.. Its all good though, I liked the peice. Good shit.

thanks buddy... I forgot to explain some shit... but I'll get to it.

Man shit was fire structure was on point them metas was nasty vocab nasty man this could make the hall of fame! 9.5/10 we should collab foe

lol...i read up to were some1 tried to leave feedback and then pimp was like.........WTF...u didnt even read it....lmao....anyways...nice drop man...started deep..it was a nice sturcture too...kept me goin....nice topic..babylon..at first i was like..hmm...ok..were we goin ere....vocab was excellent..everythin was decent...definettely one of the nice topical cats on the site...u underated too i think..u known alot........but u really are one of the nice topical cats on this site..keep em comin mayne...

yo thanks for the feedback both of you....
Tony I already posted on your open mic in your sig...
Idyllic thanks for all the praise :) I'll try to not let it go to my head :ego growing: lol nah... but thanks for the feedback... I'll get at your open mic...

uppin'...

This is so great I jizzed my shorts..
nah...nice verse overall but you getta 3/100 for not praising BC 45/50

BC is dope... there now you know I'm godly. thanks for the feed.

word you had a nice hook there. some good use of metaphores, nice flow good syllable count. decent stucutre. yep this could be a OM of the month again word to what In Vision said. the imagery was very well done. im feeling this. i was flowin wit this to some ozone beat i found and it worked well. word.
rtf on a vote:) links in the sig.
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iight man... thanks for the feed back.

man this was cool, like yur usuage of vocab, structure was cool, flow was cool...different from most which is cool, like the originality...overal 8.98/10... I got a OM comin later tonight...rtf it'll be called Meanine Pants... Secretary of State signing out this bitch....

damn man some good shit here nice metas wordplay was tight ya verses were very vivid...nice shit 8.5/10

thanks all three of you... either I've already left feed on your oM or I'll rtf... thanks for taking the time to read...

This is one of the dopest OM's i have ever read on here, EVER. Period. Emotions was good, crazy imagery, as soon as i started readin' this, only one thing came to mind, OM of the month, possibly the year. This shit was crazy nice, keep up that shit.

-CJ-

Wow village...best shit Ive read from you...

The vocab was insane...Imagery in the hook was ill....the flow was good throught out...the structure was cool...u had some typo's but i dont blame yah, it was a long piece....very hot topic forreal...every thing was on point and in depth...9.9/10...fix the typos and oyu get a 10/10 ;)

Amazing piece man

yo nice shit man. im mad i put off readin this till today. some of the best shit i read in a min. me you and the real indeph gotta collab sometimes. you had so much raw emotion in this shit man. this drop right here definately deserves a nomination for om of the month. you got my vote man. SHit was beautiful. keep it up son.

RTF... when i get my om up

thanks y'all... I'll rtf on monday when I can get on a good computer.

ahhhh, VP with another dope drop... you just keep em coming huh? lol nice shit, keep it up, this was sick, great meta's, nice flow, structure, good drop, didnt stretch your lines, I liked this a lot, 9/10

I'll tell the truth.. that was one of your weak open mics....
i just wasnt feeling it.. what happened man.. i luved all your other open mics...
7.8/10

I aint saying your shiit was horrible. it just.. i didn't like it that much..
but no doubt you are the best om writer in the site...

Did you not understand it? I'm confused... Oh well... not everyone likes everything everyone does and in this case I guess this just wasn't the type of OM that you like or maybe you had too high expectations or what not... I'm not goin' to hold an opinion against you and I hope you read some of my OM that come after this.

If fact Imma quote you yo!

Thanks to bonecollector & ~Genius~ for leaving feed.

uppin' for feedback.

A pretty good peice. I'ma break it down like this.

Lyrically-wise, this is one of your best pieces. The imagery is on point and the descriptive words you chose really helped to paint this picture. When I was reading this I kinda felt like you took your time writing it, cause it came across thought out, and deep. So how much time did you spend on it?

Now, as you may know, when I listen to a track I'm listening for one thing, that's lyrical content. I hate these rappers like 50 cent that only talk about money and bitches and getting shot. I mean it's reality so I like hearing a bit about it, but I enjoy seeing the discriptive ways someone can convey that message across. To me that's what you did here. You took some of the harsh reality's that some people face and delieverd it in such a way that is art.

What I didn't like.....

Basically, this is just constructive criticism, and because its so easy for someone to drop some feed and just say "yea your king shit way to go."
Nothing major though but there were a few lines that I wasn't feeling as much,

...too long since you all kids felt the drummin'

It makes my lost lamb of a soul more wicked...
...my principal's punchin' my one way hell borne ticket...

A few others but all-in-all, this peice should be up for drop of the month.

~Vinch

:)

Thanks Vinch... I appreciate it... upppin'... will rtf

wooheee., damn vp, you gettin some imagery in that piece,.off the wall with metas, man,seriously i aint read a nice piece like this since nos n in-visions drops...definately om of the month material...the title n the moving the text to the left?? was that a coincidence...i think not...lol....i liked this man
i aint gonna stick it with a grade or #...just know it was nice....props
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pz..........RTF

Thanks man... uppin' for more feed.

can you RTF, i left some good feed :)

I thought I did Kesse...

I'll get to it next time I have some time though...

Uppin'.