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This was feedback posted for LyricalMa$tamind
 

this was dope. flawless.............you should get it...................

can we just het this closed L.M...Not nobody is ever voting!!!!

thanx 4 da vote n good feed
still upppinnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnn

Voted For: Esco

tephlon/esco:
best line: lets rate rhymes on a scale, hence why your a LightWeight
Even british emcees sit an tell you...''Oi, you aint tight, mate!''
cold, that line there is a finisher, original, personal, and aggressive, arch likes!
and then you follow through with:
I wont lie, i got my hand on a gun while you cluth ya Ring Peice
fuck Livin Legendz, dudes idea of ''FAMILY'' fun is fuckin his Neice
both paedophillic and hillarios always a winning combination, lol. but on a level why i liked this drop more than lyricals was cos tephlons was hittin me with shit i aint heeard no-one say, so originality scores big, both structures were relatively clean.
on a negative 2 teph though your weakest line was:
if lyrics were a Leece, you'd be about 5 months OverDue
my pockets would be so big from your late payments.....
people would be like ''woah! happy ta see me, arent you?''
sounds like it was a bit rushed if u ask me. didnt really get that bit overall though 9/10 your originality and generally razor sharp p;unchlines won this one for me

lyrical mastermind:
your flow was nice, structure was a def 8.5/10. you dropped a few cold lines, my favourate was:
I’m dissing you're weak raps, ya fag style n ya queer hooks(15)
Cuz u'll 'never be signed' like some 'retarded kids yearbooks'
i like the bit bout the retarded kid, there wasn't a lot wrong with your flow and to be honest this match is tighter than the votes are showing but lyrical, you just didn't have the killer lines, you need to make sure you drop some kind of a gem when your battleing and i didnt see that today just a generic flow-diss. gear up the personals, and i think that you could have had this battle but as it stands tephlon/esco winz it 4 me


arch out

Voted For: LyricalMa$tamind

How r you a ''Mastamind''?.. you aint even masterd ya own Mind
split personality? wit them raps we're sure your a Lil Wayne Mime
5...aight the first line was blah here!!! and basically the second line aint really a punch!!
Fuck'a rhyme, he handles his voters like O.J....Usin Blackmail
Reppin Ghost town?......kid, steppin ta me i'll spook-ya-pale
5...a decent setup but ruined by the end product, the punch to it was borderline on self-glorifying!!
lets rate rhymes on a scale, hence why your a LightWeight
Even british emcees sit an tell you...''Oi, you aint tight, mate!''
6...aight the first line was kinda played, any punch on weight is gay, but the british part was funny!!
We all dont mean ta Hate, but i'm simply .........voicing Facts
an this trick thinks ''flippin'' a skript mean handstands an Akrobats
5...first line was pretty much filler, the 2nd line was not good becuz ya just played on the "flippin" if ya would have thrown in wordplay on "flippin the skript" into the acrobat shit it wud've been cool!!
layed out on his Back, its broken, but at least ya think your not Whack!
when in all reality, niggas get more quality from a 5 dollar Sac
5...no!! the setup line to the punch basically decreased the quality of the overall punch!!
while your credabilities still in-tact, u still have Chance ta Log Out
Faggot sat 'n told me he's a Milf...then asked ''whats that all about?!''
4...ok wtf!!! gayness in lines is played like fuck, and you didnt pull off the MILF line at all!!
dude actually thought it meant .......''Merkin Is 'Lyricals' fun''
like umm are u so stupid ya think i'd actually give u Propps? son!
5...not feelin this, the 2nd line basically sayin that you are so great, and you aint givin him props!!
I wont lie, i got my hand on a gun while you cluth ya Ring Peice
fuck Livin Legendz, dudes idea of ''FAMILY'' fun is fuckin his Neice
5...WTF!!! played concept and you failed to put a good twist on it!!
if lyrics were a Leece, you'd be about 5 months OverDue
my pockets would be so big from your late payments.....
people would be like ''woah! happy ta see me, arent you?''
7...WERD!!! finally a funny ass line!! this has been the best so far!!
but yo I'm Thru, your whored, now back ta the Red Light District..
Oh, we still waitin for your verse?.........I Thought I Missed-It
5...weak closer, the first line had fuck all to do with anything and you basically ended with some filler!!

OVERALL: 52/100


i could tell this would be a good battle but i wonder why he risks it(1)
he's prolly hope'n the votas'll ride his bitch ass like sea biscut(2)
5...not feelin this opener, you went on a played concept and threw in a filler setup line!!
see esco i can hurt physically but i'll leave mentality scars(3)
but with a flow like Fort Knots you aint stealin my bars(4)
5...not a real good attempt at a meta, i get the concept but you worded it wrong!!
look if you have heat jus leave it wit you cuz i kno im keepin a pistol(5)
favorite clips a magazine your body jus subscribe'd to the issue(6)
5...this was weak to!!! i mean seriously the 2nd line to it was cud've been a lot better, and not a real good punch
leave you bleedin from open tissue you thinkin im jokin wit you(7)
bitch im bout to give you an L like i was smokin wit you(8)
5...aight line, a little multi in there but again played concept you basing shit around!!
now you cant bust a pimple but claim you poppin dem thangs(9)
phew i'll have you killed in 7 days like you was watchin the rang(The Ring movie)(10)
5...decent punch, a fairly original concept but you ruined it with the whole "rang" pronunciation shit, makes it look like you were forcin the rhyme!!!
YOU VERSE ME; is like raging bulls to a matador, ya raps a bore...(11)
Get laid out thinkin U slick wit all them metaphors(12)
5...again, ya punch seems to be more filler-like than really hittin ya opponent!!
U typin with no flow, kinda like a drippin faucet... (13)
must got A.D.D...cuz i paid attention to ur rhyme, but lost it(14)
6...LoL!!! the setup was kinda weak, but the punch made me laugh a little so props for that!!
I’m dissing you're weak raps, ya fag style n ya queer hooks(15)
Cuz u'll 'never be signed' like some 'retarded kids yearbooks'(16)
6...ok, gay shit is played!!! but any line about retarded people makes me laugh!!!
Are you listening to me....call me Qtip....I'm clearin out these "wacks" (wax),(17)
Get ready...this is the message I'm sending you,525-7689, did u get the "fax",(facts)(18)
6...again, a nice punch...the first line was mediocre but the fax(facts) wordplay was pretty tight!!
Fuck it ima finish u off easy nice n slow(19)
esco got murked wurse den 5 clips 2 his dome(20)
5...a weak finish, you started with a few nice punches to the end but the closer was weak!!

OVERALL: 53/100

ok this was an average battle
i think that teph came majorly weak....i seen him do a lot better, he had quite a few played punches, adn his setups were kinda bleh!!! on e real funny punch i liked....likewise lyrical came with some played shit, some filler and no real hot killer lines, although he improved to the end but then finished weak!!!

no hate to either, both y'all can do better

but my vote goes to....

V/ - LyricalMa$tamind

be sure to return the favour on my CALI battle
link is at the bottom of my sig!!!

thanx 4 da vote n good ass feed nigga

upppppppin 4 sum movotes yall i needa get back in dis thang yerd me!

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Voted For: Esco

Yo Deez Verse Wuz Iight, I Think Esco Bought It Da Hardest, Had Dem Consistantly Dropping Punchlinez

Vote disqualified for inadequate feedback. Please see this thread if you need help on what qualifies as an acceptable explanation.

remove dat vote
his ass iz in mah cru
and he voted against me
wtf and its inadequate

lol, hey he didnt do it on purpose, i guess he was being honest, and apparently in a rush.
im sure kaos didnt mean nuttin by it

show luv thugs, your battle is worthy, i just can't believe how shabby the voting is. this match was a joy to vote on, your both evenly matched


arch out

This was feedback posted for Esco
 

i could tell this would be a good battle but i wonder why he risks it(1)
he's prolly hope'n the votas'll ride his bitch ass like sea biscut(2)

Lol but not a great punch to open with

see esco i can hurt physically but i'll leave mentality scars(3)
but with a flow like Fort Knots you aint stealin my bars(4)

Ight ok

look if you have heat jus leave it wit you cuz i kno im keepin a pistol(5)
favorite clips a magazine your body jus subscribe'd to the issue(6)

Str8

leave you bleedin from open tissue you thinkin im jokin wit you(7)
bitch im bout to give you an L like i was smokin wit you(8)

No man played

now you cant bust a pimple but claim you poppin dem thangs(9)
phew i'll have you killed in 7 days like you was watchin the rang(The Ring movie)(10)

Not v.good to be honest man

YOU VERSE ME; is like raging bulls to a matador, ya raps a bore...(11)
Get laid out thinkin U slick wit all them metaphors(12)

2nd line - wack but build up was dope

U typin with no flow, kinda like a drippin faucet... (13)
must got A.D.D...cuz i paid attention to ur rhyme, but lost it(14)

lol nice

I’m dissing you're weak raps, ya fag style n ya queer hooks(15)
Cuz u'll 'never be signed' like some 'retarded kids yearbooks'(16)

ha ight

Are you listening to me....call me Qtip....I'm clearin out these "wacks" (wax),(17)
Get ready...this is the message I'm sending you,525-7689, did u get the "fax",(facts)(18)

Played

Fuck it ima finish u off easy nice n slow(19)
esco got murked wurse den 5 clips 2 his dome(20)

Filler

VS

How r you a ''Mastamind''?.. you aint even masterd ya own Mind
split personality? wit them raps we're sure your a Lil Wayne Mime

Lol Ok personal

Fuck'a rhyme, he handles his voters like O.J....Usin Blackmail
Reppin Ghost town?......kid, steppin ta me i'll spook-ya-pale

Decent bit simple though

lets rate rhymes on a scale, hence why your a LightWeight
Even british emcees sit an tell you...''Oi, you aint tight, mate!''

Weak

We all dont mean ta Hate, but i'm simply .........voicing Facts
an this trick thinks ''flippin'' a skript mean handstands an Akrobats

Dooope

layed out on his Back, its broken, but at least ya think your not Whack!
when in all reality, niggas get more quality from a 5 dollar Sac

Ok

while your credabilities still in-tact, u still have Chance ta Log Out
Faggot sat 'n told me he's a Milf...then asked ''whats that all about?!''

lol lol

dude actually thought it meant .......''Merkin Is 'Lyricals' fun''
like umm are u so stupid ya think i'd actually give u Propps? son!

Ok again

I wont lie, i got my hand on a gun while you cluth ya Ring Peice
fuck Livin Legendz, dudes idea of ''FAMILY'' fun is fuckin his Neice

I know im in LL but hahahaha

if lyrics were a Leece, you'd be about 5 months OverDue
my pockets would be so big from your late payments.....
people would be like ''woah! happy ta see me, arent you?''

decent

but yo I'm Thru, your whored, now back ta the Red Light District..
Oh, we still waitin for your verse?.........I Thought I Missed-It

Str8 way to finish

Ok told to vote on this but not got 100v so ima leave the detailed feed instead ppl

Voted For: Esco

Vote Teph:

How r you a ''Mastamind''?.. you aint even masterd ya own Mind
split personality? wit them raps we're sure your a Lil Wayne Mime
Fuck'a rhyme, he handles his voters like O.J....Usin Blackmail
Reppin Ghost town?......kid, steppin ta me i'll spook-ya-pale

5/5 Hot line, specially the OJ.

lets rate rhymes on a scale, hence why your a LightWeight
Even british emcees sit an tell you...''Oi, you aint tight, mate!''
We all dont mean ta Hate, but i'm simply .........voicing Facts
an this trick thinks ''flippin'' a skript mean handstands an Akrobats

5/5 again hot, the thing cracked me up was the British shit

layed out on his Back, its broken, but at least ya think your not Whack!
when in all reality, niggas get more quality from a 5 dollar Sac
while your credabilities still in-tact, u still have Chance ta Log Out
Faggot sat 'n told me he's a Milf...then asked ''whats that all about?!''

2/5, not really feelin this one

dude actually thought it meant .......''Merkin Is 'Lyricals' fun''
like umm are u so stupid ya think i'd actually give u Propps? son!
I wont lie, i got my hand on a gun while you cluth ya Ring Peice
fuck Livin Legendz, dudes idea of ''FAMILY'' fun is fuckin his Neice

3/5 Nice diss here, specially the neice bit, you had me crackin

if lyrics were a Leece, you'd be about 5 months OverDue
my pockets would be so big from your late payments.....
people would be like ''woah! happy ta see me, arent you?''
but yo I'm Thru, your whored, now back ta the Red Light District..
Oh, we still waitin for your verse?.........I Thought I Missed-It

Hahaha, nice one 4/5

19/25 - good drop. I liked this because it kept me laughin and punches were hard.

i could tell this would be a good battle but i wonder why he risks it(1)
he's prolly hope'n the votas'll ride his bitch ass like sea biscut(2)
see esco i can hurt physically but i'll leave mentality scars(3)
but with a flow like Fort Knots you aint stealin my bars(4)

5/5, this was sick, hit em hard, great way to open

look if you have heat jus leave it wit you cuz i kno im keepin a pistol(5)
favorite clips a magazine your body jus subscribe'd to the issue(6)
leave you bleedin from open tissue you thinkin im jokin wit you(7)
bitch im bout to give you an L like i was smokin wit you(8)

2/5 Sorry homie wasnt feelin this

now you cant bust a pimple but claim you poppin dem thangs(9)
phew i'll have you killed in 7 days like you was watchin the rang(The Ring movie)(10)
YOU VERSE ME; is like raging bulls to a matador, ya raps a bore...(11)
Get laid out thinkin U slick wit all them metaphors(12)
U typin with no flow, kinda like a drippin faucet... (13)

3/5, like the ring movie bit and the last two lines are hot

must got A.D.D...cuz i paid attention to ur rhyme, but lost it(14)
I’m dissing you're weak raps, ya fag style n ya queer hooks(15)
Cuz u'll 'never be signed' like some 'retarded kids yearbooks'(16)
Are you listening to me....call me Qtip....I'm clearin out these "wacks" (wax),(17)

4/5, perfect bit but I didnt really feel the last line

Get ready...this is the message I'm sending you,525-7689, did u get the "fax",(facts)(18)
Fuck it ima finish u off easy nice n slow(19)
esco got murked wurse den 5 clips 2 his dome(20)

3/5, nice ending,

16/25, this was pretty good but the thing is tht u jus missed out, teph played well and dissed harder than you, ure disses were tight but his were better. I spent a long time doin this feedback can yall RTF on my battle with Big_dawg, link in sig

thanx 4 votin w/good enough feed
ima take da loss here n i kno it so sum1 get dis shit closed
good battle TEPH
holla @ me lata so i can get at u agin nigga
lol
i wanna a rematch lata
good shit mayne
im out
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Yo mayn RTF, plz i need tht bitch closed been up for time

Voted For: LyricalMa$tamind

Ayo i thought dis waz a hot battle Both Emcess brought in my opionion i think Lyrical Mastamind took it just berly. But im not gonna vote on the battle cuz i dont really like tephlon all that much so in other words it mite be considered a hate vote. So both of yall keep doing yall thang N check out my OM's N battles

http://community.rapverse.com/showb...197845&posted=1


^^^^lattest battle

ahhhh shit that was suppose to be feedback.........if yall want get it takin off dun matter to me cuz i think dude won but da shit is not explained.

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Voted For: Esco