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Voted For: Kein Witz
Aight Check This.. Troop: I Was Feeling This..The Storyline You Took With This Was Original With The Phone Call and The Ending Caught Me off Guard. There Wasn't Really Emotion, You Were Just Describing The Bad Things That Detriot Is Inhabited With. The Direction Wasn't Really There, I Felt As If Through This Whole Piece You Just Described Things. But The StoryLine Was Your Best Part. I Think You Just Need To Work On Direction and Emotion. Kein Witz: Ok, Not Too Original of A Storyline Here, but I Like How You Write Your Lines With Concepts Within Concepts. Your Emotion Was Medicore Here but Your Direction Was Pretty DeCent. I Actually Got Into The Story, but In Troops I Just Kept Reading and Reading About Descriptions of The City. Your Direction and Emotion Is What Got This For You. Vote - Kein Witz For Better Emotion and Direction Throughout His Piece. Troops Storyline and Originality Was Better, but I Just Felt Keins More. Return Favor In My Battle With Tekneek. ~R~ |
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Voted For: Kein Witz
i had a feel for this one a little bit more.... Good flow an rhyming. He knew what he was doing... rtf yo my battle sig. Much appreicated Vote disqualified for inadequate feedback. Please see this thread if you need help on what qualifies as an acceptable explanation. |
This was feedback posted for (Jimmy Pocketz)
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Man, we need to clear up this thread.
Macreep, that's probably hate, whatever. It's not explained at all...not like any of these votes really are. |
Voted For: (Jimmy Pocketz)
hmmmmm v/troop both came very well when it came to the imagery and expressing the views on the concept,the concept was meh not bad, the emotion both did ok but i felt troop won that categorie his was filled with morefeeling,kein witz had the better structure,and both had a decent vocabulary,but troop had a beter introduction and ending.....so overall iguess im saying that troop edged this out this was a very intriging battl;e nice jobs guys |
<< I thought it was a really bad battle. I need to get some unexplained votes cleared up.
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meant to be feedback.....I was gon vote but I feel asleep as this was a boring topical......and your Kein????I didn't know that. |
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Voted For: (Jimmy Pocketz)
oooooooooooops....my fault man.................... Vote disqualified for inadequate feedback. Please see this thread if you need help on what qualifies as an acceptable explanation. |
This was feedback posted for (Jimmy Pocketz)
TROOP!
Had better verse... fucking computer slow.. cant write nuff to vote |
This was feedback posted for Kein Witz
nice battle both ya'll but its to close to vote ..
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This was feedback posted for Kein Witz
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This was feedback posted for (Jimmy Pocketz)
polls....this shit been open forever...just tell strobe to close it....
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This was feedback posted for (Jimmy Pocketz)
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Voted For: (Jimmy Pocketz)
Not very impressed that you guys couldn't come up with anything other than a cops life sucks might as well kill yourself... While police do have a high suicide rate... most do not kill them selves... Neither one of your verses really stuck the topic of a cop on patrol... T.R.O.O.P. did a better job... but it not being 1st person kinda hurt it... emotionally both of these verse were lacking... Crazy Hades' verse was rather okwardly worded and didn't flow very well... Both T.r.O.O.P.'s piece was slightly better he carried the topic better and flowed better... there was also better imagery in his... Hades jumped around from thought to thought more with no smooth transitions.. Vote: T.R.O.O.P. |
...Yeah, cuz flow matters a whole lot in topicals.
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This was feedback posted for (Jimmy Pocketz)
dope vocabulary trooop, i liked it and the strory line was dope
and thats a fyne sigg |
Lmao...yeah right....'dope vocabulary and storyline'. His vocabulary sucks and so does his storyline. As a matter of fact, since this is about six months old, I'd murder him and pretty much anyone else nowadays.
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