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Voted For: artÃ-stica~Mente
Drakel: Your Verse Had Some Originality In That Topical Piece. I Was Feeling The Direction You Took and How In Your Lines You Had Inner-Concepts Connecting Together. Was Pretty Decent. Your Structure Was Nice and Your Emotion Was Good. Overall Pretty Decent Drop. Tweety: Your First Paragraph of Scripture Was Medicore...Your Emotion Wasn't Really Pushed Through Too Much, but I Felt Your Direction and Delivery of This Piece Was Hot. As Your Second Paragraph Kicked In, It Started Grabbing My Attention More and Had Me Wanting To Read The Rest. Your Emotion Starting Coming Forth and I Just Felt This Was The Highlight of Your Piece. Vote - Tweety...I Felt Your Piece More Than Drakels, It Just Stuck Out To Me More and I Related To It More. ~R~ |
^ you vote against me in everything....starting to get annoying dude
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^I Voted Honestly..
But You Vote Against Me In Everything As Well....Guess We Just Don't Like Each Others Styles :-/ ~R~ |
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but its funny how this wasn't upped for more than a day, but for some reason you go and pick out my battle
i guess people just dont appreciate orgininality these days =/ |
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Voted For: artÃ-stica~Mente
This was a hard one to vote on.. Both of you stretch your lines like theres no tomorrow ---------________--------- Stretched lines makes these things REAL long and tedious to read.. But to be honest, I was feeling tweetys verse more. I understood where she was comming from and the story painted a more clear image than what I could pick up on when I was reading daub's verse.. I can’t believe I was hypnotized by you, and tightly bound in your spell till December ^That was a nicly put together line.. Only things you needa work on with topicals is to try and make them into more of a rap song, use more multis, dont stretch lines and remember to only write stuff you would spit on a track. Best way to do this, is just by playing a beat and writing to it as if your writing a song. Daubs your shit was good, it was just at times I didnt know where you were going with it, I realise you were talking about a fling with some chick, but you would of benefitted from using clearer references, like actually telling the story mixed in with the emotions you were trying to express. Wasnt a bad topical though and you beat tweety on rhyming technique only slightly. But the overall vote has to go to tweety.. Just dont write as stretched lines next battle rofl :( |
.................Lol @ Daubs............................It's drakel you fool. Lol Uppin
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Yeah my bad, just woke up.. I'm braindead for names :( soz drakel..
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hmm, didn't think my lines were too stretched....cause it all flowed.......but word
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Voted For: artÃ-stica~Mente
wow nice topicals from the both of u both did good imagery was both had the imagery and the vocab the words were very emotional as well both brung that i yall verses yo u both did good but really at the end is so much as a tie but i do have to pick a winner so.....tweety.....u had alot of imagery and just a good amount of that made u win this toipical dont get me wrong drakel did good but didnt have that many as tweety and also......tweety u had also the emotion build there just work a little more on vocab ok......thats all and drakel just work a lil more on ur emotions.....ok but u did do good on vocab....... so keep it up u both....... v/ tweety aka artistica mente........ |
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