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Voted For: KhAoZ ThEoRy
Indeph Verse g'luck fam Damn homie you got respect,you a veteran, WAIT... that fake quote,would probably work better when named. ^ Hmm wasn't feelin this as an opener a bit -_- IMO that sig states a quote,that coulda brought up your hope... yeah you could prove me wrong.....if I thought you were dope. ^ again kinda basic diss punch not ooo material fam and there's a lie in the box you supposed to be reppin in... nigga everyone got skills,on your level of excellence. ^ lol nice rhyme punch good in this bar nice diss westside till you die,then after this you are midwest... no more game no more dre,go and listen to dipset. ^ wack...no diss punch non existent Go read a Book, "OF" shouldn't be O-V?... shit,with you O.G's could of meant Oh Geez. ^ nice closer on the OV personal flipped quite good Overall Verse lacked dawg...2 out of 5 bars were good the rest was filler flow and structure were good it was the punches and personals that lacked under average verse IMO KhAoZ ThEoRy Verse Yo!.. Talkin bout ''strap up''?...Rockin a titty cup, Da heat in ur ''Bra''* ''Punch''? ugh, U dont even have da experience 2 serve at a Bar! ^ good opener punch ok diss = there battlin u aint gettin very far, Lyke a Vietnemese on da Frontline 0-0? juz goes 2 show Ya skillz ''premature'' & this aint ur time! ^ diss there 1st line a bit meh 2nd line an hmm punch we go Rhyme 4 Rhyme? so lame dude asked me 2 ''Swap Verses'' he got worried, no propps & it it took him dayz 2 Rehearse-His ^ -_- not feelin it i seen a lot of "took days to" bars First Skriptz, Now U?..........Thanks dude, 4 siggin my ''Sonz'' ur juz ''weak-fun''...claimin ''its so hard'' 2 pull off a ''BIG PUN'' ^ diss there Big Pun name was aight coulda been better though if u own a Gun, stick ya ''trigger finger'' where it Belongs ..then rite b4 u ''pull''..go 'head & listen 2 Nirvana songs ^ diss -_- punch aight but not feelin it majorly I'm not wrong, suicidez ya best Option, lyke Gothic Kids only ''time'' u see'n ''action'' iz watchin old redman Vids ^ punch there but not ooooo but diss ok Verses r hated, handstanin lookin at ''mom'' iz ur only ''wow'' shit ur shamin a legend...change da pic, cuz even he hates u now ^ ok closer diss str8 basic rhyme Overall Again not a great verse you threw more bars into it few more punches more time it looked like you put into this i think you got the win due to more on point punches & personals...but ima comment your vocab is's on some MaRVJay1009 shit lol...drop it if you writing for audio like that then fair nuff but in text you gotta be more understandable coz not everyone writes how you write words like "lyke" & "propps" it would be jus as easy to type "like" & "props" ya feel me... V/KhAoZ ThEoRy...but overall under average verses from both |
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thanx mad dog!!!!! uppin diz battleeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee
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khaoz shit is all played! uppin this for indephz!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!
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yoooooooo, hit diz battle up faaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaamz
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Voted For: KhAoZ ThEoRy
Damn homie you got respect,you a veteran, WAIT... that fake quote,would probably work better when named. weak start... that sig states a quote,that coulda brought up your hope... yeah you could prove me wrong.....if I thought you were dope. weak.. and there's a lie in the box you supposed to be reppin in... nigga everyone got skills,on your level of excellence. aight.. westside till you die,then after this you are midwest... no more game no more dre,go and listen to dipset. aight Go read a Book, "OF" shouldn't be O-V?... shit,with you O.G's could of meant Oh Geez. decent ending.. ya verse i thought lacked punches, ya flow was basic creativeness was basic, 1 or 2 decent lines that it i think u slept on him and it showed... 4.5/10 Talkin bout ''strap up''?...Rockin a titty cup, Da heat in ur ''Bra''* ''Punch''? ugh, U dont even have da experience 2 serve at a Bar! ha good start good punch... battlin u aint gettin very far, Lyke a Vietnemese on da Frontline 0-0? juz goes 2 show Ya skillz ''premature'' & this aint ur time! aight.. we go Rhyme 4 Rhyme? so lame dude asked me 2 ''Swap Verses'' he got worried, no propps & it it took him dayz 2 Rehearse-His weak.. First Skriptz, Now U?..........Thanks dude, 4 siggin my ''Sonz'' ur juz ''weak-fun''...claimin ''its so hard'' 2 pull off a ''BIG PUN'' ha feeling this, good word-play... if u own a Gun, stick ya ''trigger finger'' where it Belongs ..then rite b4 u ''pull''..go 'head & listen 2 Nirvana songs 1st line decent, 2ed weak... I'm not wrong, suicidez ya best Option, lyke Gothic Kids only ''time'' u see'n ''action'' iz watchin old redman Vids aight.. Verses r hated, handstanin lookin at ''mom'' iz ur only ''wow'' shit ur shamin a legend...change da pic, cuz even he hates u now decent... u had better punches, personals was aight, flow decent creativeness was on-point i thought u came harder in this battle good drop... 7/10 |
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Voted For: Indephz
that sig states a quote,that coulda brought up your hope... yeah you could prove me wrong.....if I thought you were dope. Vrs. Talkin bout ''strap up''?...Rockin a titty cup, Da heat in ur ''Bra''* ''Punch''? ugh, U dont even have da experience 2 serve at a Bar! battlin u aint gettin very far, Lyke a Vietnemese on da Frontline 0-0? juz goes 2 show Ya skillz ''premature'' & this aint ur time! we go Rhyme 4 Rhyme? so lame dude asked me 2 ''Swap Verses'' he got worried, no propps & it it took him dayz 2 Rehearse-His First Skriptz, Now U?..........Thanks dude, 4 siggin my ''Sonz'' ur juz ''weak-fun''...claimin ''its so hard'' 2 pull off a ''BIG PUN'' if u own a Gun, stick ya ''trigger finger'' where it Belongs ..then rite b4 u ''pull''..go 'head & listen 2 Nirvana songs I'm not wrong, suicidez ya best Option, lyke Gothic Kids only ''time'' u see'n ''action'' iz watchin old redman Vids Verses r hated, handstanin lookin at ''mom'' iz ur only ''wow'' shit ur shamin a legend...change da pic, cuz even he hates u now[b] [b]Overall All It Was A One Sided Battle....Nothing Really Big...Good Shit Fromut But Khaoz I Think You Could Have Came Hard Good Job Indephz....v/indephz.......~1~ Vote disqualified for inadequate feedback. Please see this thread if you need help on what qualifies as an acceptable explanation. |
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Voted For: Indephz
good personalsindeph flow was good no filler straight forward work on ur vocab though but it didnt look like u tryed good verse over all k work on ur personals theyre really corny and up ur vocab get some good metas good battle but indephs verse was more personal and straight forward Vote disqualified for inadequate feedback. Please see this thread if you need help on what qualifies as an acceptable explanation. |
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Voted For: KhAoZ ThEoRy
Damn homie you got respect,you a veteran, WAIT... that fake quote,would probably work better when named. ^^whack....2/10 that sig states a quote,that coulda brought up your hope... yeah you could prove me wrong.....if I thought you were dope. ^^Meh...Ok...5/10 and there's a lie in the box you supposed to be reppin in... nigga everyone got skills,on your level of excellence. ^^didn't rhyme well..basic...3/10 westside till you die,then after this you are midwest... no more game no more dre,go and listen to dipset. ^^weak...what the hell?...3/10 Go read a Book, "OF" shouldn't be O-V?... shit,with you O.G's could of meant Oh Geez. ^^Meh...w/e...2/10 Damn...this verse was weak man.I'm just being honest here too.No wordplay....just you stating some shit.Flow was choppy...I mean...rhyming reppin-in with excellence?...NO...make it rhyme better.Poor attempt at slant rhyming.Work on punches. Talkin bout ''strap up''?...Rockin a titty cup, Da heat in ur ''Bra''* ''Punch''? ugh, U dont even have da experience 2 serve at a Bar! ^^bars relating to rap and drinks are played..2/10 battlin u aint gettin very far, Lyke a Vietnemese on da Frontline 0-0? juz goes 2 show Ya skillz ''premature'' & this aint ur time! ^^good personal....6/10 we go Rhyme 4 Rhyme? so lame dude asked me 2 ''Swap Verses'' he got worried, no propps & it it took him dayz 2 Rehearse-His ^^basic....3/10 First Skriptz, Now U?..........Thanks dude, 4 siggin my ''Sonz'' ur juz ''weak-fun''...claimin ''its so hard'' 2 pull off a ''BIG PUN'' ^^OK....5/10 if u own a Gun, stick ya ''trigger finger'' where it Belongs ..then rite b4 u ''pull''..go 'head & listen 2 Nirvana songs ^^meh...w/e...4/10 I'm not wrong, suicidez ya best Option, lyke Gothic Kids only ''time'' u see'n ''action'' iz watchin old redman Vids ^^OK....5/10 Verses r hated, handstanin lookin at ''mom'' iz ur only ''wow'' shit ur shamin a legend...change da pic, cuz even he hates u now ^^Ok...6/10 OK...an ite verse.Just stop with all the (").Just looks annoying and fucks up the structure.Had some personals.But the reason you got this battle is for actually having punches that hit unlike indeph. Vote-Khaoz RTF BELOW http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=203538 |
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