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Voted For: Pen N' Paper

This shit was real one sided. pen n paper took this battle without a doubt. His punches were hittin a whole lot harder than k-trini's jabs. pen n paper actually used personals which swung the battle in his favour from more or less the first line even.
K-trini no hate but if you make you verse hit hard enough you really shouldn't see it necessary to wrap the ends of each line with "~"s
pen n paper's verse had a nicer structure and smoother flow.and his vocab was a lot more elevated than k-trini's vocab. k-trini's verse was just too simple.
Best line in this battle is pen n paper's line about K-trini's verse "shittin" (8th line)
I was feelin pen n paper's verse a whole lot more so therefore i think he won this

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Voted For: K-Trini

Pen 'N' Paper verse

K-Trini u lacked skill, Livin Legendz didn’t want u cuz of ur stupidity
I always knew ya were an idiot, but rite now ur showin me ur simplicity
^ Punch = meh...diss is there coulda been worded better though

U rappin is like “Mic-heal Jordan” makin errors being a baseball player
The way u win battles is by swaying and realize in fact that ur a failure
^ -_- not feelin this the diss is there but again no punch

Man u “corny” I eat u up like “corn flakes” wit milk like you for breakfast
Even “lunch” or “dinner” man ill be “serving” ur wack ass so u can take this
^ don't rhyme but punch is there but could be worded better

K-Trini man ur a mini bitch wit a gurl name ur punches are not gon be hittin
Ur other verses ive seen “stink like shit” whats the difference ur verse is shittin
^ meh...not feelin again

So K just face it u gay and theres no way for u to win this battle no prospect
Even in GFX, Topical, Audio and this in Text ill murk u cuz u just a speck…
^ weak closer no punch

Overall
You got the right idea wit flow and layout but it's the punches/personals all the important parts about text that you missin...use punches/personals there was none in this verse it was just filler disses were there but they were backed up by nothing

K-Trini Verse

Pen&Paper So obssesed on stayin behind ,you'd ~write-it-late~
And you don't like the pen's function.....you just ~like-it's-shape~
^ lol good opener nice rhyme

It's like I'm amputating on a nuclues,cause I'm~stoppin-his-growth~
And this bitch dun wanna rap,he wanna ram my~cockin-his-throat~
^ punch played but there 1st line self-G but nice rhyme again

You would neva get close to stars like a review on a bad movie
Pen can follow ethics made by kin,but ya verse still won't move me
^ self-g blah

Closest you get to stackin joints,is when you~pack-a-blunt~
Only time you loaded is when ya pumped ~back-and-front~
^ ok closer nice rhyme

Overall
Easy win...punches were there hit reasonably hard...flow was good you had everything Pen&Paper didn't good verse.

V/K-Trini...this is an RTF vote...no deadline set :thumbup:

Voted For: Pen N' Paper

break down.

flow both
punches pp
wordplay pp
multis k trini

yo imma go with pp on this one you's both came strong but unfortunetly there can only be one winner and pen and paper just edged it.
good battle both ya

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Voted For: K-Trini

k-trini gets my vote here.......

pen n paper- it looks like u didnt even try with this battle....i mean your tried to come up with good concepts but they all just turned out to shit...

k-trini- all the homo cock in ur mouth shit is played out try to be more original..ya opener was iight..it could have been more complex and re-worded but it was straight... try to make ur verse more transitional so it flows betta....

vote/ k-trini

Voted For: Pen N' Paper

Decent battle.............

Trini-
Elevating daily...i still cant help but think your an alias just fuckin around with everybody

good verse tho....decent hhittin personals, nothin too tight, punches were straight, didnt have me like ''ooh''...but it was straight, just work on bein more creative with the wordplay in yourpunz, good drop tho

Pen-

Nice, real nice...ya personals just kept comin decent hit in like 80% of ya battle, wordplay was cool...nothin too complex, but still...it was straight, vocab was pretty even with y'all....but your punches hit alot harder, they was set up alot better too....you got this, man.


Vote/pen n paper,