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Voted For: Frank~Castle

wow...very weak battle

Flow - frank...simple because his verse was actually makin alil bit of sense...focus was all over the place....focus had ALOT of self glory in his verse...more of an open mic verse then a battle verse

Punches - ew...but i gotta go wit Frank...focus u said the most PLAYED OUT line of all time..."de feet, defeat"...no hate but that is old as hell....frank wasnt much better but they hit jus alilllllll harder but not much...actually imma change this 2 a TIE

Personals - none...no explanation needed...jus look at what yall wrote...work on that

Multis - blahh...gotta say Frank because at least he tried in those first 2 barz...other then that... both of yall gotta at least attempt some more multis 2 make da flow sound iller

originality - blahhh... Frank... jus because Focus used that Defeat line...that was FARRR from original...nuff sed

Wordplay - i'll actually give that 2 Focus...none of it made me think that hard but some of the wordplay was more complex then what Frank was puttin in...mostly a simple verse from Frank but i feel it was more effective

Vote - Frank Castle

overall it was a weak battle...both of u need to attack the other battler wit harder punches...but all in all i was feelin Frank's verse more...it was alil more effective in my mind !


yall can return the favor on the battle in my sig...good look

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Voted For: Frank~Castle

You wanted ta battle,For you Today's hopeless!
Im like Visine with tha spit,You need me ta STAY FOCUS!
^^No punch in here....0/10
Im attrocious tah roaches,sprayin whom ever is closes.
While you just smoke an mirrors,Just a bunch ah Hocus Pocus!
^^flowed bad...bad punch....2/10
Your skills are bogus,they dont appear like Its me verses ah Ghost.
An the only time you where above Number 1 is when you made your first post!
^^OK........6/10
I know it hurts close...cuz my lines kill like stress can!!
Hey!,you might be married ta the game but Im always the best~MAN!
^^coulda been worded better....4/10
Let me Load up the clip like ah movie an show you the best part!
An this battle is short,cuz your lines are so long they got stretch marks!
^^Played.....4/10

OK....flow was off at points and structure was OK.Punches lacked.1st bar was not a punch.It was you talking about yourself.2nd bar was weak.3rd bar was your best bar.What you really need to do is stop talking about yourself so much and drop punches.

Cat I’m like a “boiled egg” in the morning –“hard to beat”
You like a “marathon runner” with bad shoes need to deal with” de- feet” (Defeat)
^^de feet/defeat lines are played as fuck...1/10
Cat your lines “dull” they need “sharpness”
So stop writing with a broken “pencil” is “pointless”
^^Whack.....2/10
My lines are like an “elephant's thought” they carry a lot of “weight”
Cat you’ve lost this battle it not your fault its fate/
^^Whacker....0/10
So cat don’t run you mouth like u great/
I know u aint nothing but a fool/
^^Not a punch...0/10
Cause like x-ray technician I see right through you
^^gonna finish that bar?

Ok...your structure was horrible.Flow was meh.Punches were far too basic.That da feet/defeat line has been played out in 2002.Aside from that bar...there was nothing.No punches.You didn't even finish that bar in the last line.Work on everything

Vote-FrankCastle
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