Uppin this old ass thread

This shit was BOOOOOOOOOOOORRRRRRRRRIIIIIINNNNNNNNG.

I can't stand "part" pieces cuz it's just so lame when you're getting into a story and it just stops abruptly. But, in terms of content it was an ok piece. Seen alot of concepts much similar to this but you held your own. Would have like of seen more creativity. It was cool though.

first off, both of your verses were good. they both stuck to the topic, which i thought was a well chosen one. some vocab around the piece, but that's alright cuz sometimes a piece sounds better when it is simple.

lucky luciano--great verse man. lots of nice rhyming. in some ways, it was kinda funny like at the end how "I FUCKIN HATE YOU BITCH.....but Yet i Still Love your Ass" which i thought was cool. flow was nice. it kept the piece together, and so did the structure. great job

black queen-- your verse was unique. i dont really like the style of rhyming with the same word on the next line...i think it feels a little monotonous...but that's just me. you did it here and there. structure was good, and so was flow.

overall both of you did a great job putting together this piece. 8/10