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Zone Out 12-18-05 01:07 PM

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Originally Posted by The Revelation
I write to deliver a message. I don't care bout money, I don't care bout fans, as long as someone listens and my lyrics make them think, then I've accomplished my job. Will I ever become big? Probably not. Why? Because I don't rap about shooting people, hos, or anything like that. I promote a more Godly lifestyle, that's my choice. Could I rap about guns? Probably. Would I look stupid doing it? For sure. Honestly man, unless you switch up your flow and get some creativity, you aren't gonna go far. You are like every other thug rapper, no better no worse. You don't stand out, and that's gonna be your downfall.

Also, I don't want to be stuck behind a computer the rest of my life. I want to go out and actually do something in the sun.


Quote:
Originally Posted by Will S.Unyu
Dont respond and say "I rap for myself, I dont rap for fans"
If that was the case, you wouldnt ask for feedback.

See, what did I tell ya.
And obviously you have never listened to my songs.
Just cos you see my persona as being a thug, that doesnt mean thats all I rap about.
I rap about shit niggas can relate to.
I rap about shit that when niggas hear it, they be like "damn, this nigga tight as hell"
I dont rap about hoes, money, cars, clothes.
I rap about street shit.
Some street niggas can relate to hoes, money, cars, clothes, but I cant. Well, I CAN relate to hoes, money, and clothes.
lmfao

Sean Gunner 12-18-05 01:21 PM

I have listened, and they put me to sleep. You have nothing original man. I can go buy a 50 cent CD and hear what you say in better quality and with better beats. I'm just telling ya, your stuff is nothing that no one has heard before. You don't stand out. You will not make it unless you stand out somehow. And you don't to me. You are just a guy talking about the streets like the other 500,000 rappers out there.

Zone Out 12-18-05 01:26 PM

Yeah yeah
okay, well then I guess its 500,000 other rappers out there that can rip you
cos I mos def. can
battle or stfu, lame man

Sean Gunner 12-18-05 01:33 PM

Quote:
Originally Posted by Will S.Unyu
Yeah yeah
okay, well then I guess its 500,000 other rappers out there that can rip you
cos I mos def. can
battle or stfu, lame man


Haha, why would I waste my time recording a battle against you? You have more experience, and not to mention you are a battler at heart anyway. I write songs, not disses. My text skill should tell you that.

Zone Out 12-18-05 01:36 PM

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Originally Posted by The Revelation
Haha, why would I waste my time recording a battle against you? You have more experience, and not to mention you are a battler at heart anyway. I write songs, not disses. My text skill should tell you that.

No, I am not a battler at heart, I actually suck at battles.
But yeah, you rght not to accept, knowin I would shit on you

Sean Gunner 12-18-05 01:41 PM

For now you would. Give me some time, cuz whether you like it or not, I am elevating and eventually we will battle. Have fun while you can Will. px

Pop Lotty 12-18-05 01:49 PM

You ppl suck balls.

∆ P E X X 12-18-05 03:56 PM

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Originally Posted by ~Souljah~
yo apexx can you tell me what you think of the instrumentals in the soundclick in my sig



Sounds liek you're using the default sound-sets which means that all the beats sound like gameboy beats. The assembly is good, but the default tones blow. Remember that Fruity Loops was originally designed to make videogame beats and tones for cellphones and shit liek that, so if you want to make music that's actually listenable, you gotta get other soundsets, sample, or drop FL completely.


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Originally Posted by It's SPuL!
lmao @ this thread. Tell me what your jizz thinks of my songs yo.

www.soundclick.com/spulakareckless

~_~



You still sound exactly like Carson. Flow, delivery, lyrics, even your voice. You should stop rapping for about a month so you don't have this pre-conception of what your style is and jsut re-invent your self. Qual's good, but marketability wise, nah. No energy (which dosen't mean shouting), no cadence and a 1-syl rhymescheme. Old. House of Pain style. BTW, you need to do a lot more solo songs because it makes you look like you have a REAL low writing out-put or are just lazy.

Quote:
Originally Posted by Will S.Unyu
www.soundclick.com/zoneout

My music kills sperm cells
Seein how its crack and all of that good shit



For starters, it sounds like you've got a ferocious lisp. Your flow is texty, like your lyrics are there but your delivery is flat as shit like you're always depressed, even when you're amped. Your vocals have no mood at all, which makes you sound soul-less no matter what you're saying. Get drunk some time and record, you'll see wht emotion in lyrics should sound like. Your flow goes off at times. I don't gotta tell you that your quality is against the ropes and your mic is boo-T. Sounds like you got an accent on your R's and a's wich throws me off sometimes. Just dosen't sound liek you're agile while spittin yet, sounds liek you're tripping over your tongue. You need more time to solidify on your flow and learning to EQ wouldn't hurt you either so you can get some more body out of your mic. Get a pop filter, because your music is useless without it.

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Originally Posted by Past Tense
hahha yeah...nice parody thread :rolleyes:

www.soundclick.com/jroy

honest breakdown opinion on what you think i could do too make my self better since u are an elite head here



Your beats all sound hurt as hell to and it's because you're not using hip-hop instruments at all, you're using techno and D&B instruments and trying to use them in a hip-hop way. Those sounds are cool and all, but remember that the original music it came out of has about 12-20 different sounds all going on at once and the pace is high, so the music sounds a lot thicker. On your slower hip-hop beats with way less sounds, it sounds empty and boring. They also lack any flare and in most cases, a hook.

Your rhymes are okay. You're bout where I'd expect an average person to be, you just need more time to polish off because your flow is rushed sometimes. I'd say about 1/3rd the time from what I've seen. Just do more flow checking, because if you think you sound off beat, you do.

TeamOne 12-18-05 04:05 PM

Quote:
Originally Posted by It's SPuL!
lmao @ this thread. Tell me what your jizz thinks of my songs yo.

www.soundclick.com/spulakareckless

~_~


I just nutted to that track......

death jizz

TeamOne 12-18-05 04:05 PM

i think spul might sound like that cuz hes from Mass btw..... right?

∆ P E X X 12-18-05 04:11 PM

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Originally Posted by FuxJustAWord
i think spul might sound like that cuz hes from Mass btw..... right?



nah. That's like saying all rappers from where ever the hell you're form all sound the same. Maybe Carson was his Idol or something. I dunno the cause, but I DO know the effect.

J. Luth 12-18-05 04:34 PM

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Originally Posted by FuxJustAWord
I just nutted to that track......

death jizz

lmao what track?


but yea, thanks for feed Apexx.

and lol nah, carson wasn't my idol. Didn't like him that much really. But word, I'll see what I can do.

Sean Gunner 12-18-05 07:13 PM

Can ya leave some feed on my song? Reminiscing is the best in my opinion.

Young_law 12-18-05 11:38 PM

http://www.soundclick.com/thatnigga

Phenom-in-all 12-19-05 12:19 AM

don't blame a dudes wackness on their location... I've heard illy rappers from all over, and hey.... I'm from Canada and I ain't that bad :\

Zone Out 12-19-05 02:05 AM

Quote:
Originally Posted by Apexx


For starters, it sounds like you've got a ferocious lisp. Your flow is texty, like your lyrics are there but your delivery is flat as shit like you're always depressed, even when you're amped. Your vocals have no mood at all, which makes you sound soul-less no matter what you're saying. Get drunk some time and record, you'll see wht emotion in lyrics should sound like. Your flow goes off at times. I don't gotta tell you that your quality is against the ropes and your mic is boo-T. Sounds like you got an accent on your R's and a's wich throws me off sometimes. Just dosen't sound liek you're agile while spittin yet, sounds liek you're tripping over your tongue. You need more time to solidify on your flow and learning to EQ wouldn't hurt you either so you can get some more body out of your mic. Get a pop filter, because your music is useless without it.

Hopefully you'll change that, dog
and word @ everything else
:-( @ lisp.
Niggas on here have said that, but I dont hear it

∆ P E X X 12-19-05 05:04 AM

Quote:
Originally Posted by The Revelation
Can ya leave some feed on my song? Reminiscing is the best in my opinion.



Nah, fuck that.


I'll do the rest of what ever links are in here when ever I get around to it. this is so far off the back burners thta it aint' even on the stove.

WhoAmI 12-19-05 06:23 AM

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Originally Posted by KOOL COL-B
that untitled song iz fr-fr-fr-fresh. i luv that shit. i wanna d/l it mp3, but noOoOoOoooOooooOooOOOOOO, just cuz tha color of my skin iz a lil different, PFFT, :mad: werd


well get at me on msn: dark_manner@hotmail.com

i'll send you the tune from there

and yo thanks apexx but only one of the beats was a FL beat


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