it gets very boring you need to add some metaphors or punchlines keep people locked in. right now your like pancakes. it looks good at first but by the end your sick of it. just work on makin it more. complete not just alot of big words alright

This was alright i did like the flow on it!

This was pretty alright choppy at times but all around good!

Good thats all i can say i like it and it flowed nice!!

This was cool lol nice flow keep it up and do sum more nigga!

damn last few peeps thanx 4 the response send me links and ill check yours peace

I liked it it was really long but sumtimes thats wat it takes make sum more like this!

it was good....

Yo This Was Tight, Had A Nice Flow, And Good WordPlay, Uppin.....

thanx for the response keep'em comin send me linx 2 comment back peace

ok....the first verse was ok...had some misspelling with the bigger words though....but flowed smoother and was easier to read than your second and third verses.... the second and third verse u fell off ...it seems like u were just rushing on those verses...u even repeated yourself on one part.....the hooks weren't good they seemed rushed to......no punches or metas in it nothing like that.... after all u saying u the "lyrical hustla" so i expected those....so yeah u should actually slow down and think about what your putting down instead of rushing it.....

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it was nothing rushed but thanx 4 the comment this song old when i get around ill edit it but for now ima keep droppin shit thanx 4 feed peace

well if it wasn't rushed.....then u need to work on being creative.....u gotta paint a picture with words.....well u said this is old i dunno how old but im sure the next time u drop something new it should be more elevated than this.....good look though man keep writing ~1~