u need an online sentence generator. lmao cheesy

oooohhh...i didn't read that except part....i apologize...

Hop off kid you're not sick, fuckin' with thugs'll leave you eatin' bombs whore,
I walk off a cliff and into a pit that was dug to china during the vietnam war.

^ doper than your whole verse.

that makes no sense lol... is that supposed to be emo bcuz ur talkin about killin urself by walkkin off a cliff.... pathetic. that little line u had sucked so bad hahahahahahaa dude just quit now

both whack as fuck. lol

derek. did u even write that to a beat? if not how do u know it will go to a beat.

Omg your interpretation of my lines makes me think they are something they aren't!

You're GENIUS.

i can find beats for all my shit lol... u didnt like it??

It doesn't matter if he wrote it to the beat he'll have to jam it in there anyway.

ur just combinding words that rhyme. they rnt even good. just quick. youre terrible. if u dont like it LEAVE. its not like anyone here is on ur side. ur just diggin ur self in a hole and burying ur self in horse shit.

your raps are boring damn and they played as fuck
woulda though i was a chef they way i souffled them up

ricky whos gonna do the second verse? do u wanna? and ill clean it up with the 3rd verse? or do u want me to do the hooks too and u write the next 2 verses

u should be lucky im gunna throw in a verse.

u do first and third i do 2nd and hooks. but im not writing shit till u give me a fucking topic and beat.

im just combining words that rhyme?

God lmfao

okay okay man I agree

I only combine words that rhyme


which means I'm about twice as good as you currently.

I'll break down your verse.
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call me the lyrical mineral,
i got the most style and plenty of potential,

wtf is a lyrical mineral? What is the virtue of a mineral being lyrical? Why would you be called a lyrical mineral? Mineral and potential barely even rhyme.

my lyrics combined with this game r a needed essential,
u cant take my words cuz ur the lowest of the minimal,

Not only does that not make sense, it implies that you are essential to rap, when obviously it has been around for years before you started doing it.

my behavior is the worst of the cynical,
u can try stealin these lines,
i got many more but keep them confidential,
they r so powerful they can start an influential rap attack,

-_-

a presidential impeachment and vote for the Big D or Ric B,
we the smartest and illest, our style is the chillest,
u can try to beat it but u'll never fulfill this,

...

we're unique like an abstract artist,
u can never step into our scene,
try ur hardest but u'll never get close,
it'll all be a dream and invisible like a ghost,

.......

we the hardest ever and we bringin it down together,
lyrical master minds from january to december,

I guess that makes sense..

my lyrics r so accurate like a bulls eye with a dart,
the doctors and masters of the hip-hop art,
me and Ric B r the owners, ya better check billboards top 100 soon,
cuz we gonne be on top of the charts.

I doubt that even had a flow.




good?

No! So stop acting like you're the most amazing thing in the world and start working on your rapping. You can pop off bullshit about how you're making a rap group and your going to change the world and you can smoke anybody in a battle since you've improved a lot, but that shit doesn't mean a single thing. It doesn't change the fact that you can't even rap decently yet. Less talking, more practicing.

the topic is being TOP OF THE CHARTS. and i think we should use lose yourself by eminem or gang injunctions by WC as the beat or just put them together in 2 seperates songs with gang injunctions as one beat and the other song with lose yourself as the beat. then see which one sounds better

Yo' get this piece of shit dnota off this site, why'd you even bring this noob here, he can't rhyme for shit, he thinks big words make him look important

Hes every played punch, pun and sterotype summ'd up in one bum.. Seriously though, your verse was trash, Who in the fuck still rhymse about a "Rap attack" rofl, kid your a herb, you said your 10x better now than you ever were and you still suck, i can only imagine how bad you were

wait im still confused....are you starting a text group....you said youd drop a verse all i see are some lyrics which terumoto very noteably pointed out was sub par.....please please tell me you are actually making music n didnt waste all this time stickin up for a "rap group" of texting....

hahahahaa, i love this..

well im not teaching him ne thing..im just giving him a chance to jump on a few tracks.

he's writing his own shit.

ok bud. i appreciate u takin time to read it and judge it. but jeez i just turned 18.. ive only been listening to rap since i was 12 and the majority has been pac big nas and bone thugs. and they do rhyme... have u listened to the way immortal technique writes, or r.a. the rugged man, or nas, or keith murray, jedi mind tricks, kanye, common, or lupe??? they kinda have the same style but their writing is like 203203840293092382x better and theyve been doin it much longer than me. all i need is practice. shit dude. but w.e i dont care ima stick by the way i want. im stickin to the way i like it. listen to the song ALL IM HEARING by krayzie bone. hes saying that eveyrone is tryna be like some one else and doesnt come with their own stlye. im coin with my own style so im just doin wat i want and wat i like

goin* not coin lol

You suck, i dont care how all the big heads in hip hop write, its not how you write, and yes you dumb shit you are being fake, you said before ' I write using big words like jay-z", right there your already jocking him and any other name you mentioned, so just stfu, you suck end of topic, closing statement

^happy 1000th post.

What you're doing is copying what he's saying by trying to make your own personal style.

I would have helped you if you had come to me because I've been rapping since you were listening to it, and I just turned 17.

I have 6 years on me already and I make music.

Good luck on being yourself in a group of millions of others that are rapping trying to be theirselves.

wat i meant by lyrical mineral... a mineral is a vitamin... which u need vitamins to live... and im sure everyone listens to music and would be lost with out it... so im saying that u need me to survive... get it?

You'd be one less person in the world before you'd be a loss to music.

dude its a fucking EXPRESSION. STOP TAKIN IT LITERALLY AND LIKE IM ALREADY TOP OF THE GAME... jesus fucking christ.

Yeah, it's called slant rhyming... But mineral/potential is still a bad rhyme. The flow in the last few bars was basically non-existent. A few rhymes here and there doesn't mean it flows.

It's good that you think that way, but personally I don't think you can pull off having a unique style at the level you're at. You need to learn the rules, then you can break them skillfully.

derek heres a tip.

if u have to give a lengthy explanation for one of ur lines. ur better of not using it. cuz if u cant get to ur point in ur lines. then ur point just isnt worth getting to ya dig?

and using big words=shit...making sense and opening up peoples ears=goldmine.

dont just use big words becuz other people do...

if u want ur own style, u gotta find wut ur good at...u gotta find how u can express ur self with music and make sense.

u cant just use big words and be like....yo hocus pocus my rhymes be like supercalafragalisticexpaladocious

do u guys understand wat i meant by lyrical mineral now?

Call me your royal highness, if I ever come light, you're the lightest,
My words so fucking BIG they had to shorten the words used to describe it

Yeah man your shits hard as a rock we get it we get it.

i asked if u understand it... ok w.e ima start my 3rd verse and take ur advice

lol 2v's such a fucking dickhead..

Since this thread has become somewhat of a cypher -_- lol..

ya not lifting ya game bitch, stop hitting the same tip,
must be constipated yo, cause no kidding you aint shit..
ya flows skittled 'n basic, you're a little bit gay kid.
I'd give you the mic but this lyrical mineral's brittle 'n breaks quick,
Unique? you're a ghost writing phantom child,
just a sucker with ya flow biting random styles,
Kid, you must be sick, cause damn you don't sound good,
you're wack, your raps sadder than an emo's outlook,
son my tone is lethal, lax, bro ya flow is fecal..
Your spit's stink up the streets like they were homeless people,

and aphil is secretly madly in love with me.

ok i got my 3rd verse. want me to spit it?

ok well anyways... here it is:





ok heres an orientation
god made me with lots of concentration
he needed help creating a master
so he started a congregation with lots of admiration
my nickname from zues was "the application"
he never made a mistake so aberrations were a loss
hip and hop was my favored combination from the boss
after 18 years of preperation and being patient
this is my year of musical and educational graduation
ima go on physical hibernation and melodious vacation
this game is givin me a harmonic invitation to the lyrical federation
and im gonna make it beautiful like a ultraviolet illumination
destroy all the new artists and send them in therapeutic rehabilitation
it'll be considered "the character assassination"
ima rise to the top and be a symbolic representation
to the next generations and be their motivation
when i die i hope to be a revelation cuz of my obligation to this organization
this type of hip and hop articulation is wat makes up my heart
it'll never fall apart untill i pass way and break apart
so if this is where i start then im gonna start to work up
untill i have every artists in my hands and once i reach my destination
of being number 1 on top of this thing called the billboard charts.




good? i think its pretty good

did u go on www.rhymezone.com lol

cuz u used a lot of ion's lol

yeah i always go there. i love that site

you like it?? i like it a lot