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Aight Crit forget them kids Estyle they weak ..
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I'll try my best Haven't written anything since the Exams.. |
Your best is always appreciated sexy
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so how's everything people?
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Sup Lola things r cool with me well happy the weekend is here !! been
works been well rubbish ha ha. Hows u ma ? Stay up 1~ |
Yea i been good, how is everybody?
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I've been doing fine critic, school is hetic for me at this point 4 months till the end of the school year...woot!..
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Nice one good luck in your finals,.. I know how revision takes up loads of time.
Bet your counting the days until the end of school. |
ya'll in High school or College?
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New semester today.
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^^ u had a run down with willsuckyou aswell..lol now suddently he doesnt reply much anymore huh..lol
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Yeah no doubt...he's lucky I came as soft as I did in our battle...
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High school...... |
oooh ....i miss the pep rally's..lol seniors?
LE..lol word he whinin like crazu right now |
Grrr that storm mofo is doing my head in I have called him out twice and
he's still ducking.. 10mins Check, 30mins to key now as most of u know I'm like the worse text head on RV ha ha but its the principal, anyway this is my verse.. This kid's life is a storm, it never rains, he’s poor Wouldn’t be dope with foreheads like Rushmore Sure just like most of E-Style he’s a bore ya dig ? The only thing that’s got any bottle is Geda’s sig It’s a Dazasta your back polluting our screens U see Daz Y your unpopular like the hip hop scene The close his name was Dazasta then Daz and on his old profile everywhere is hiphopscene.com which hasn't been updated since sometime last year. Any way I might just turn this into a diss ha ha stay up all. 1~ |
Storm is gay his freakin nerd watch out he does have ghost writers...
his alias is daz |
Where is everyone!!
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CHillen..........
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Sup DV I'm here !!
Sup fams what's good !! I won the battle against Storm !! he dropped 14 lines I said 6 max dumb ass !!! I was lucky ha ha text is something I really don't feel ha ha. 1~ |
loooooool storm is a pussy
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Hi.............
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I'm Bizack and ready to kill like Crizack, looks like i already got "Beef" with Lekion or w/e and Status aka Creative.....lmao...
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Who?............
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hahaha aight we regroeping right now i made a try out thread so fam we can do this lola babygirl how ya been?
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Doing fine, just got back into battling again. Battling Po It in the Elevated Front lines, hmmm I think he's the same one who got banned on RB but made it into 'Po 'Ethics', should be a good battle. In Addition to that I also signed up on RM in the Topical League. So yeah. My Life? Well, I'm doing better in school and starting to be kind to people, so no more fights for me. Lol.
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blah.....i wanna drop a diss track....Key, i got all my audio ish my mic, amp, stand and filter
so i'm ready for some tracks hoe |
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haha get on aim...so we can discuss this...and Lola word RM is full of pricks and good for you for being nice to people... :)..lol i read your OM damn i was impressed |
Thanks, I'm going to start writing to beats for now on. Key when you write to a beat do you just str8 up write it on a notebook, or listen to it first and try to get it all in your head and then write or play the beat pause it and then write a line. Need some answers.
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Just let the beat play and write and after the beat is done just repeat it
thats what i do u should get a mic seriously and drop some |
I know and Will Do........
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http://www.soundclick.com/pro/view/...7&content=music
"Don't You worry"....Sounds Like a good beat to me, what you think Key Rogue? |
am feelin that beat.....its smooth and sample is nice as fuck..more on R&B Tip..though yeah drop on that i wanna hear ya voice
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Sitting in my room, under the moon, hearing blues,
bearing in this sad tune, my heart been badly bruised, ripples of the guitar sending waves into my badger mind, where the place "self" I can't find, call me Ray, I'm blind, heart of drum comes into play and it sounds so familiar, It eases my pain, and it clears up my brain, this is a killer, tip tap, that must be the rain, the quiet ones runs down my cheeks, heart throbbing in agony when everytime I *sigh* I'm drowning in my own ocean, pores open with salty sweats, I'm fend to lose my breath, if I don't swim myself out of this. My mind blurry like looking into a screene with full of "rice", I'm swimming hard as I can, but my arms are weak ..It looks like I'm fend to lose the fight, sharks coming after me, but what's the use, I have no life, so I weaken myself and drown, no accident, for a purpose, I'm going to hell anyways, why waste space on this surface, where it's going to hurt worse, the exposure is going to sting, the big bold letters in the article going to put me in eternity sleep so I leave u with this tape, "don't worry" and a loud bang, now everything done changed, lips are sealed once again, what i've done can't be reverse, one mistake and my life is over. True story here, a man beat his girlfriend to death, he didn't mean to, he wanted to teach her a lesson and not cheat on him again, after that the cops said they found a tape called "Don't worry" It plays a instrumental, which the cops believed he made, it was played by a guitar and drums. Chea. ---------------------------------------------------------------------- Wrote this from that beat, a Topical verse, but w.e I know it's not going to flow anyways :( |
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if you don't mind a critique... this was pretty hot... flow wasn't bad for text... this could be a sick verse with a few key elements added... 1. develope the story... not the topic... if you understand what I'm saying... listen to Jay Z - Meet the parents... the topic was... mom, dad split... dad never met his son... son followed dad's footsteps and blah blah blah blah... the story was built around that... naw mean..? www.soundclick.com/imethemixtape listen to rick jordan... it's the 2nd part to a song called Mark Anthony... but without hearing Mark Anthony you can still get the story... 2. delivery, structure & flow... not bad... you can go through and cut some words out so it flows alot better... and move some things around to change it up... add a lil freeway in there naw mean... ie: fend to lose breath, if I don't swim out of this. My mind blurry... looking into a screene with full of "rice", hard as I can, swimming shit... my arms are weak ...it's to deep, startin to sink... Im losin the fight, 3. Maybe add some empty space... (this would be done more so in audio) such as... (I'll try to explain... the periods that I will use right now are spaces...) ie: bold letters in a paper, put me to sleep I leave u with this tape to see................plus a loud bang, now everything changed, lips sealed again, can't reverse one mistake...................... and my life is over... I hope this helped... if not... no worries. |
Thanks av, I appreciate your crit.
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yo dv...for that collab you want to spit just one verse right?
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How many verses should I spit, cuz all i got is the hotnesssssssssssssssssss.
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whats up Vango!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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