decent stuff here, i've seen better from you but not bad
everything was intact for the most part..you had some
vocab working and the flow was on point except for a
stretched line or two, but i think you could benefit from
digging a little deeper content wise..not to take anything
away from yer work or anything like that. i just would have liked
to have seen you tap into that real creativity to really grab
the reader's attention..regardless props man n keep at it

weerd dawg thanks uppin this..............

****
 

Solid shit man 4 stars**** There were a couple of lines you should re-edit til you get it right but it does take talent as well as time to do this; If you put the time into it you can be a success!!!
Yo Yo Yo
i'm soft as a kitten my script aint writtin
I caught you beating off with your mommas oven mitten
i'll piss in yo mouth while you shit yo pants
passed out in seconds contempory trance
wake up wreck your method then do a dance
this is 4 the kids & it's time to take a glance
this aint that good but yo backs pinned to the matts
chewy is the best & thats just the facts
not too shabby now its time to kiss my ass
when I drop the beat the shit always lasts!
how was that?? i'm brand new to this site just trying to get some respect
it's no diss just some garbage to be analyzed

....................Rofl..............:)

...uppin........

HAHAHAHAHAHHAHAHAHAHAHA!
LMAO!

Herbs crack the shit outta me... lmao

anyway, VIRTUE...........
It was good, but im only gonna state the bad things. (its constructive criticism :thumbup:)
It seemed like you were making a hella effort for the vocab.. like.. the flow was a little off cos of it... I didnt read what others said but im sure its been said before.. jus lettin ya know..

and.. use bigger writing!!!

Can't argue with that 99% shyt... i checked ya last bar again... and again, i don't get the last part of that bar... missin' rhymes like c sections? other than that, though, i was feeling it

*chew187... a lil werd of advice.... drop dat shyt in ya own thread... shyt's kinda disrespectful with that freepost bullshyt.... leave ya feedback then leave it alone...one

drop wuz hot.vocab excellent,structure wuz good,flow wuz sik,10/10.

weerd thanks OMB <<still betta den you...:) uppin.....

uppin...................................

Good Shit Hommie Vocabulary And Structure All Good Fam

Big Ups---

weerd thats my godson right there dope piece good vocab and meta's i was feeling this should have made it longer though good emotion and depth hot piece 8.5/10 keep em coming

weerd thanks flow apreciate tha luv.........

yo i dont get it???
why ya on this GUY NUTS FOR???

this verse was ok noting more....

flow was preety good * at times *
vocab was decent * it sorda fucked up ya lines now N then but not bad *
no punches * which u need*
u was more focus on flowing with vocab which is aight when u use MULTIS to help make the read fire u know what im saying....

all around this was average besides ya vocab...

7.0 outta 10 keep elevating...

* P.S to ALL HOP OF HES NUTS DANM I'VE READ WAY BETTER AND YA AINT REPLY TO THERE SO WTF?? *

i'll even drop a link in here if ya want me to, from my own teamate who had a open mic diss to D.O.P.E.M.A.N he killed that verse flow, punches, creativeness, vocab ALL AROUND TIGHT... this open mic diss had noting close to it yet that thought it was one of the BEST DROP IN A MIN WTF IS THAT???

let him prove him-self befor ya hop on the ban-wagon....

this wasnt a diss....an not to be cocky or nothin but ive seen your shit your to basic no vocab anutha lame ass herb...fucka