RapVerse.com Community - i need some opinions on this letter/help on it.

RapVerse.com Community (http://community.rapverse.com/index.php)

- Lyricist Lounge (http://community.rapverse.com/forumdisplay.php?f=182)

- - i need some opinions on this letter/help on it. (http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=246275)

Quote:

Originally Posted by Baphomet

shes got her learners... :thumbup:

If it tastes good, eat it. If it feels good, fuck it.

Age is just a number.

Quote:

Originally Posted by .Poetic.

Dea,

This letter i am writing you isnt to sit here and preech and repeat myself like i have always have done in the past. It is actually to inform you that I want to sincerly Apoligise for our past. to the days when I would not be civil about things and instead of being mature I would resort to a boy. aswell as me hurting your heart and not thinking about things when being said out loud. I know i've caused a world full of drama and problems back then which I am sorry for. All the problems I had myself I am trying to fix which is everything you've ever told me to stop or not do ever again, like my most recent problems of me blowin you up, getting the last word, to me making you very upset. All these problems that have been here and some still here I am working on very hard baby. And While I am Single and waiting for you to take me back as your boyfriend when you get lonly and tierd of bein single when you take me back. I will by then Have these problems taken care of because from our past till now I've realised what a special Girl you are. No Girl out there has anything you have from beauty to the non drinking or smoking or the love you have to give with such a caressing feeling. Baby as much as i Like to mess around this what im about to say isnt joking around and is the honest to god truth. You truly are an Angel your amazing and I dont know were I would be if it wasnt for you. I've spent so much time pointing fingers and putting blame on things besides myself when really the problems all resorted back to me when I was to blind to see that. I Am working so hard baby to get these problems taken care of so that way when i am your boyfriend again when You take me back there wont be anymore troubles or problems like in the past going from days of happiness and Divine Love to Spending our Arguing frustrating days in hell. All the times we ever argued or called eachother names or just got to eachother it just gets to you and me. And Baby I Wanna Stop arguing thats why I am fixing my problems because i no longer wanna have to put you through my stupid things. Everyday I think back to when My arm was wrapped around you holding you close with smiles to happiness. To non stop kissing every 10 seconds! remember that. to hearing each night you tell me you love me. It brings tears to my eyes remembering those times. But I've Realised that during this break we have untill were boyfriend and girlfriend again it gives me time to recover and bring back those things 100% with me and you. And that baby is why Im fixing my problems is because everyday like that when you take me back everyday after that I wanna have just like when we were At the park Kissing loving and smiling with happiness everyday weather we see eachother often or not. like how i used to complain about the things you did I am terribly sorry for baby. but like i said everyday after you take me back I wont and will not Screw things up like before. I wanna show you a man that you've always looked for in guys and always wanted but no one could give you which is what I wanna give you from right now and everyday after were back together as boyfriend and girlfriend. To Fill your heart with warmth and Love and trust in me and your care for me again. I've been so foolish before and now baby I know i can do this for you my love my Everything. And only you baby. I Hope you can believe me when i say im gonna do this baby cus im doing it for one reason and that reason is so that way when im your boyfriend again you wont go through pain and suffering ever again im sorry baby. I Love you so much Baby.I thank God that I met you. I cant wait untill you take me back cus all that i said Is gonna happen. I Love you with all my heart body and soul.

always yours

Anthony

i need your help on making it better if you can see any errors and revising help.

Okay dude.. this is terrible. You repeat the same fucking thing 100 times, I'm hoping/praying you're not with somebody handicapped.

I think this shit is weak, but if you REALLY want some help, I'll give you some Red Bull charm.

Try this..

I know I'm probably not the person you really want to be hearing from right now, but I have to get some things off my chest.

Baby,

I know that I've made some previous mistakes and have acted immature at times when I should have been a bigger man than I was, but I want to be that man now. I want to apologize for the way things have been lately. I know that we've been getting into these little pointless arguments over nothing all the time and I want to admit these were my fault and I'm willing to take the blame for them. I've just been going through a stressful period in my life and the moment I lost you I realized you were the best thing in it. You were the best thing I've ever had going for me and I know now how much of a fool I was before and I promise I can change that. Every memory I have of us together brings a smile to my face and I hope they have the same effect on you. I'm not writing this to make you feel bad or sorry for me, that's not my intention at all. It's just really important to me that you know how much I love you and how overwhelmed I would be to have you back in my life. I don't want to put any pressure on you, but if you need anything you can always call me or come over. I'm always here for you, no matter what.

Love you,

Anthony

that wuz pretty good Reb Bull, but i dunno, i think it just needs a lil touch up to fit this situation...

Quote:

Originally Posted by Adam

I know I'm probably not the person you really want to be hearing from right now, but I have to get some things off my chest.

Ronald,

I know that I've made some previous mistakes and have acted immature at times when I should have been a bigger man than I was, but I want to be that man now. I want to apologize for eating at Wendy's, I was just curious, that's all, the Baconater looked so good on TV, not that there's anything wrong with the Big Mac, I just wanted to try something new. I want to admit this was my fault and I'm willing to take the blame for it. I've just been going through a stressful period in my life and the moment I lost you I realized McDonald's was the best thing in it. It was the best thing I've ever had going for me and I know now how much of a fool I was before and I promise I can change that. Every memory I have of us together brings a smile to my face and I hope they have the same effect on you. I'm not writing this to make you feel bad or sorry for me, that's not my intention at all. It's just really important to me that you know how much I love you and how overwhelmed I would be to have you back in my life. I don't want to put any pressure on you, but if you need anything you can always call me or come over. I'm always here for you, no matter what. Give Grimace my regards.

Love you,

The Hamburglar

ah, that's better :cool: werd

^rofl you own sonnnn

Poetic...you cool by me....so thats why im going to be honest. LEAVE HER....She is not worth ya time homie. Too talented.....and....and....i dont know what else to say. But yeah leave her. She stole ya heart and shared with other guys and a chick. Just be done with her.

Quote:

Originally Posted by Chris Stylez

this aint that girl man.

WHat the fuck.....How many girls you got...Last Time i checked it was Dea.......

Quote:

Originally Posted by .Poetic.

no spul fuckin hates me. just like he said came here and now english is his major. well I want help and i dont get jack shit but fuckin shit talking.

and fyi this is a different girl she will go for this letter.

this letter makes you sound like a fucking virgin, period. You want help? Fucking burn that piece of shit up, ignore the bitch for a week...n if she keeps bugging you to be with her, than she obviously LIKES YOU. If she ignroes you and you nothing happens, than you and her obviously weren't meant to be. :shocked:

but dude, WHAT THE FUCK?? You want help PROOF READIN A FUCKING LOVE LETTER???

HERE'S THE BEST FUCKING HELP YOU'LL EVER GET

STOP AND LISTEN TO YOUR SELF

..cuz you sound like a pussy-whiped bitch

Just do what they do in Japan. Run up from behind her, yank her shirt down, and have your friend film it and put it on Youtube.

It's called sharking, and it works almost every time.

you know i think ive actually head of that before

Quote:

Originally Posted by Chris Stylez

Poetic...you cool by me....so thats why im going to be honest. LEAVE HER....She is not worth ya time homie. Too talented.....and....and....i dont know what else to say. But yeah leave her. She stole ya heart and shared with other guys and a chick. Just be done with her.

man that part had me crackin up for real lol

Quote:

Originally Posted by .Poetic.

no this isnt that girl. which that never happened.

^^^sorry to out you bruh, but this definately has to be the same chick.

didnt you say that like a month ago she had you arrested for domestic violence??? i know that baby you were with at that point in time was the same chick as the one that got bukkakked up on by 11 dudes, a butch chick and a dog, or whatever the rumor is.

so if this isnt the same broad (no offense), then you obviously fell in love very quickly with another woman within a few weeks. if thats the case, then this letter will most definately come off as more than desperate.

take some time off...and get your mind right bruh. step back from the situation and analyze the overall picture carefully. the realest shit that i can tell you is this: regardless if this is a super brand new girl that you're all ga-ga over, or if its the amateur porn star...always think with your brain and not your heart. trust me. you must always stay in control of yourself and realize that not everything can be fixed...or is even worth fixing.

s.v.

Quote:

Originally Posted by Chris Stylez

WHat the fuck.....How many girls you got...Last Time i checked it was Dea.......

yea thats her but shes a virgin.

All this over a girl that looks like this

hmm she actually does look like the type to sleep with 9 dudes and a chick and ysdat