uppin this homie!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!!!!!!!^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^ ^^^^come on!!!!!!!!!!!!!!^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^ ^^^^^^^^^^^
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come opn people man vote man we need to close thise battle!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Voted For: B-MAC
B-Mac-Had some Ok vocab.Coulda been better.Flow was your best strenght here.All through the verse it stayed strong and consistant.But the content and wording may be your achilles heel.I see your concepts and ideas are good...but your wording was a little..meh.I think you were a little too direct.You stayed on topic through the whole verse though.Overall-7/10 Shodown-Man...you need work homie.Ok...first off..structure...stop making every word begin with a capital and don't end all ur lines with "/".That kinda shit makes it look newbish.If you had enough confidence in your verse..you wouldn't need to start every word with a capital.And for the content..you seem to have something to say...but you have trouble puttin it together in a captivating way.As for the rhyming...too basic.New rhyme scheme needed too. Vote-B-Mac RTF BELOW PLEASE http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=203538 ^c'mon...ya'll know how long voting for topicals take.. |
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Voted For: opt1k
Close battle here, Both structures need steppin up, optik drop the /'s man. Vocab was there in both but seemed more consistant in opts. The reason ima give him my vote is because his imagery was just better in this piece, mac yours was deep too about the anti depressants and shit but optiks story got me more involved. Both had it there but for more emotion optik takes it. both stay up, NO HATE RTF IN SIG. |
i can only RTF on porn identity cuz verbal and UNF are in my crew so yea homie thanks for the vote man real.........we need to close this battle man what a waste of a drop real......
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Voted For: B-MAC
Peace to that bro, this was pretty fucking awesome. I hope you will challenge me in a topic Vote disqualified for inadequate feedback. Please see this thread if you need help on what qualifies as an acceptable explanation. |
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