Voted For: Sticky Bandit

ok here we go

Structure-I.D.(the font makes ur strructure better by an inch)
Punches-Kordozar(i liked da Boozer line, especialy since i like ball)
Flow-No 1(text has no flow)
Multies-I.D(had alot more than K)
Kordozar 1/ I.D. 2/

Ovveral-I.Di( i was feelin urs way more, nice to both, no hate)

V/I.D.

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Voted For: Kordozar

Gotta give this one to Kordozar on this one , pretty dope battle

Kor
Ya Onli Chances Of Bein On Top Is Goin First With Verse..
U Half Way Dead,I Give You Tha Cash So Ya Family Can Get Ya Herse..
decent opener
And I'll Throw Ya Organs In Tha Water With Tha Rest Of Ya "Smurfs"..
Tha Chicks Pics He Showed Was Fake,Cus He Dates On Tha Computer..
This Loser,Cant Rap So He Should Attend Ta "Jazz"Like Carlos Boozer...
pretty dope
A Skittle,His Gangs Wass Rtc,Gsw,Alkqn Than Hoover...
He Even Got His Self Confused,His Locations Wass Nc,Lb,And Now Vegas...
Hes A "Pussy",That Hangs With "Pussies"Like Female 3Some Rapist..
decent
Original "Fruit Loop",He Wass On Tha Cereal Box With "Tocann"..
Tha Pc Is Life,Cus Even His Pic Shows That He Onli Has 2 Friends..
"Here He Come",He Wont Stand A Chance If I Lended Him A Extra Pair Of Legs..
Its No Hope,Hes Close Ta Bien "Toast" Like Bacon And Eggs..
Begs Fa Pc Chicks,Cuz U Got It Bad..
DaNewBreed562?Guess Thats A New Type Of Fags..
21-0,Most His Wins Came 4rm Pepl With Under 600 Posts..
And He Dick Sucks Ta Get A Win,Doin Pm Fa Votes...
lol, lazy so ill just break it down from here pretty dope verse seen you do alot better but nice shyt 7.5/10

I.D
Even His Net Life Shows He Got A Wife, Commitment On The Net??
I'll Put A Knife To Your Moms Rectum, And Slice Your Wifes Neck...
thought his wife was a computer?
You Got A Net Life, Coz Your On The PC 24/7 365 Days A Year.....
I Can't Here Shit You Saying Like...... Handicaps With No Ears...
dope
Cheating Bitch IM'ing Me To Get Voted Against That Nigka Chaos
Go Back To "Wrapping" Your "Subway Sandwitches" Fati Lay Off
not feelin it
You Beating Me???Your Imagination Must Be Like Disney Pictures
Coz Your Lyrical Scriptures Is Like Special Ed Kids, Painting Picture
LMOA, NICE !
Your Writing Is Crooked, You Couldn't Write Straight If Rap Was Stencils
You Pre-Write Lyrics From Artist And Re-Use Uhm Like Recycled Pencils
decent
Your Another Parallel, You Couldn't Elevate If You Rode In A Plain......
It's Simple To See Like Gladiators In Spain...I'm Killing Him In Pain....
weak
Mathematical Equation But Yet You Couldn't Solve An Exponent
You Couldn't Put A Bar Together If It Came With One Component
Your Career's Looking Ugly, Like Ya Net Bitches Face..... Tiesha..
You Fucking Homo Bitch, Hired Michael Jackson To Bleach Ya....
decent closer but ima have to hand this one to kordoozar 7/10


VOTE=Kordozar

This was feedback posted for Kordozar
 

just checking polls.................

Voted For: Kordozar

Ok i vote for u cuz u had stronger punches and better flow wat I liked about yours is that u had multis and personals and all dat shit but L.d ur shit was wack homie wtf is that stabbin and shit dats played out like cum lines man so im tellin u to elavate A LOT but Kordozar u won this battle by far no bullshit u had way better everything then him so

Vote goes to Kordozar

Voted For: Kordozar

this was a really close battle and not a bad one at all it ws coo
kordazar
you had fair structure not stretched lines and all
good punches and personals hit hard and well and made actualyl sence..
good verse 8 / 10

id kinda wack structure and long lines strethed pretty far
you had good punches and weaker personals
this was a close battle but kord one becuz of better eprsonals and structure..

pm me if either of u ahve any questions pc
return the favor *honest*
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Voted For: Kordozar

Kordozar
Ya Onli Chances Of Bein On Top Is Goin First With Verse..
U Half Way Dead,I Give You Tha Cash So Ya Family Can Get Ya Herse..
And I'll Throw Ya Organs In Tha Water With Tha Rest Of Ya "Smurfs"..
first line was played, changing structure half way through makes your verse look sloppy (3 lines, 3 lines, 2 lines...) ...3/10
Tha Chicks Pics He Showed Was Fake,Cus He Dates On Tha Computer..
This Loser,Cant Rap So He Should Attend Ta "Jazz"Like Carlos Boozer...
A Skittle,His Gangs Wass Rtc,Gsw,Alkqn Than Hoover...
weak punch attemps ...4/10
He Even Got His Self Confused,His Locations Wass Nc,Lb,And Now Vegas...
Hes A "Pussy",That Hangs With "Pussies"Like Female 3Some Rapist..
bad grammar, no real punches. ...4/10
Original "Fruit Loop",He Wass On Tha Cereal Box With "Tocann"..
Tha Pc Is Life,Cus Even His Pic Shows That He Onli Has 2 Friends..
Watch your spelling, 2nd line-decient personal ...7/10
"Here He Come",He Wont Stand A Chance If I Lended Him A Extra Pair Of Legs..
Its No Hope,Hes Close Ta Bien "Toast" Like Bacon And Eggs..
dope first line, weaker second ...7/10
Begs Fa Pc Chicks,Cuz U Got It Bad..
DaNewBreed562?Guess Thats A New Type Of Fags..
Didnt understand the punch or how you rhymed ...2/10
21-0,Most His Wins Came 4rm Pepl With Under 600 Posts..
And He Dick Sucks Ta Get A Win,Doin Pm Fa Votes...
Alright personals, consistanty. ...8/10

Overall...Due to wack opening lines which consisted of 2 sets of 3 lines, you screwed yourself out of being able to get points for all 16 lines. If you do not understand what I mean, PM me. You will recieve 0/10 for 1 set of lines which is non-existant. In my opinion that was weak so in my vote I will do it however I want. Total = 35 out of a possible 80.

Sticky Bandit
Even His Net Life Shows He Got A Wife, Commitment On The Net??
I'll Put A Knife To Your Moms Rectum, And Slice Your Wifes Neck...
nice punch towards his mom/wife...lol, not him tho ...7/10
You Got A Net Life, Coz Your On The PC 24/7 365 Days A Year.....
I Can't Here Shit You Saying Like...... Handicaps With No Ears...
Strong metaphor ...9/10
Cheating Bitch IM'ing Me To Get Voted Against That Nigka Chaos
Go Back To "Wrapping" Your "Subway Sandwitches" Fati Lay Off
I feel lines like this are played, get creative. 2/10
You Beating Me???Your Imagination Must Be Like Disney Pictures
Coz Your Lyrical Scriptures Is Like Special Ed Kids, Painting Picture
You rhymed the same words, very weak. 1 point for the Multie tho ...1/10
Your Writing Is Crooked, You Couldn't Write Straight If Rap Was Stencils
You Pre-Write Lyrics From Artist And Re-Use Uhm Like
Recycled Pencils
weak punch...watch grammar/spelling, 1 for creativness ...1/10
Your Another Parallel, You Couldn't Elevate If You Rode In A Plain......
It's Simple To See Like Gladiators In Spain...I'm Killing Him In Pain....
played punch/weak attempts ...2/10
Mathematical Equation But Yet You Couldn't Solve An Exponent
You Couldn't Put A Bar Together If It Came With One Component
Decient wordplay ...7/10
Your Career's Looking Ugly, Like Ya Net Bitches Face..... Tiesha..
You Fucking Homo Bitch, Hired Michael Jackson To Bleach Ya....
Weaker closer ...3/10

Overall...You had the advantage in this battle dawg cause your line structuring was clean and simple (2 lines, 2 lines, 2 lines) Since your opponent made 2 sets of his lines rhyming 3 lines as 1 bar, you have got the advantage. Total = 32 out of a possibe 80

Kordozar=35/80
Sticky Bandit =32/80
...I know I judge hard but its the only way ya'll will learn and in this case it was close but theres gotta be a winner and I feel that Kordozar was that person today, Nice efforts Bandit

Good battle to both of you, no hate...I just gave my hounest vote and critiqued the both of you in a way I was comfortable with. Props to both. peace.