This is probably the best open mic i have ever read in my life......
First off, flow was flawless... not once did i read this piece through and have ti come out sounding weird.... never fell off.... vocab... what can i say.... i didnt understand a total of 3 words here... thats never happened before in an open mic that ive read, so im happy... just learnt some new words... when it came to imagery and wordplay, this was second to none... i love how you flipped a played topic into something completely fresh and interesting... makes me think about the world
The only thing that could be improved is the rhyming... no multies... but that doesnt matter, i'd rather read this piece of beautiful storytelling than have it exchanged for more rhymes... keep up the excellent work
9.999999/10
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