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frein-ma$ter 10-21-04 07:01 AM

lets finish votin this battle.....come on!!!!!!!!!

TuNiT 10-22-04 05:42 AM

Voted For: sabotage

sabotage took diz hands down...
i culdnt even work out diz other guyz flow, dat structure is horrible fien...
puns, structure an personals all go to sabotage
an without decent structure, puns n personals, ya verse is pointless....

frien, work on structure, cause ya rhyme scheme is so fucked up, i had to read it 3 times before i culd figure dat shit out
an thats not good, thats not good at all...
major flaw

so sabotage got diz
no hate
an return da fave vs keyz cuz its my first ever battl an i need 2 kno if itz iight or whakked

frein-ma$ter 10-22-04 03:43 PM

uppin for votess.........and if u dont know how to vote or u vote based on structure ur a herb....

uppin!!

Implicit 10-22-04 05:52 PM

^but if they have a hard time reading it then it aint bad if they base it partially on that........still uppin 4 votes..............

frein-ma$ter 10-22-04 10:01 PM

come on uppin......i wanna finish this battle fuck...its been up for like a month!!!!!

Implicit 10-23-04 12:08 AM

ok man uppin 4 votes...............................

Implicit 10-23-04 04:07 PM

can we get some votes in here?........................

Implicit 10-24-04 03:36 PM

ay man can we get some votes?......................

Paris Hilton666 10-24-04 03:54 PM

This was feedback posted for frein-ma$ter
 
good shit but i aint voting

Implicit 10-26-04 02:30 AM

uppin this for votes..............................

BkBrawla 10-27-04 06:03 PM

Voted For: sabotage

you a newb to this site so I don’t wanna hurt you little buddy
frein-master reminds me of homosexual comics…..so gay its funny
^^^^^^^^^^^^^ PEEP'Z NEED TO STOP WITH THA GAY VOTES ITS KINDA PLAYED OUT TO ME


don’t know the difference between 10 lines and 5 bars kid go to hell
aint nobody feelin your sh!t except that dude from jail
^^^^^^^^^^^^^ LINE'Z STRETCH MISSING UP DA FLOW AND PLUS GAY PUNCHES ARE PLAYED OUT TO ME

in other words u get your fudge packed ya whole flows pre written
ima make this ‘fool vanish’ like ‘retarded magicians’
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^ AIGHT AIGHT DATS AN GOOD "OK" PUNCH AND LINES TO STRETCH MAYNE




you only got 12 posts so ur chance to win is lessened
he runs his head into ‘english books’ in order to claim he got ‘sentenced’
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^ AIGHT AIGHT GOOD CLOSA MAYNE GOOD

SABOTAGE-ALTHOUGH YA VERSE WAS AN "OK" ONE BUT DA PUNCHES WERE PLAYED AND NOT HITTIN IT ELEVATE ON PUNCHES HIT HARDER MAYNE
AND DA LINEZ ARE TO STRETCH EVEN IT UP "OK"






Like rough sex when i poke his ass-is-ruined ...shove my fist through his gums make him hand-me-his-chewins... ,this pansy-is-ruined.. cause prem a ‘cut his chest‘, and (leave sabotage showing more heart) than a Family Reunion[b]//
^^^^^^^^^^^ NO NO DA STRUTRE IS WACK,DA FLOW IS WACK,BUT GOOD PUNCH BUT U LOST POINTS OFF DA FLOW AND DA STRUTURE MAYNE






...Trample-his-doings, he better duck when the free-mag-blows-him...or else the clip a leave his [b](health broke down) like rehab programs...his knee-scabs-open, when i shoot-this-zero...When i pull, it’ll leave sabotage (covering his face more times) than a super hero//
..Boot this queer~o, and get schooled when this dude’s majoring.. cause My verse Puts (Dyn in his place) more times than food catering...|new hater stings, come at request as soon as my foe’s need...Prem sharp, the knife a leave (blood leaking out ya face) like a fucking nose bleed//

^^^^^^^^^^^^^ AIGHT U BASICALLY WENT TWO DIFFERENT WAYS WITH DIS ONE,A GOOD PUNCH ONE SENTENCE AND DAT SUPERHERO LINE DIDNT MADE SENSE



‘Close reads’, prem ‘ends chapters’ and haze his glaze...daze his wayz...like sneaking into a (retard’s racist movement)...Sab only accepted posed as Krazy K’s //
^^^^^^^^^^^^ AIGHT GOOD PUNCH BUT DAMN IT DA FLOW IS MESSED UP AND DA STRUTURE STOP WITH DA () ITS HARD TO READ MAYNE




Aint no breakin this don.. after battle his speech shakin and drawn...(Sabotage winning?) I leave this bitch (holding his mouth) like he’s taken a yawn//
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^ OK LOOK DA CLOSA WAS GOOD BUT DA FLOW AND DA STRUTURE U LACKED IN DEM MAKIN YA PUNCHES SOUND DUMB AND HARD TO READ


FREIN-MASTER-YA VERSE WAS "OK" DA PUNCHES WERE GOOD BUT DA STRUTURE AND YA FLOW IT JUST MESSED THINGS UP ON DIS VERSE

1.IT MADE YA PUNCHES SOUND DUMB
2.HARD TO READ
3.STOP WITH THA ()

THATS ALL

U NEED TO WORK ON STRUTURE,WITHOUT FLOW,YA VERSE AINT GOING TO SOUND RIGHT.

OVERALL=AIGHT AIGHT SABOTAGE U HAD "Ok" FLOW DA LINES WERE TO STRETCHY,
FREIN-MASTER-YA FLOW WAS NOT IN PLACE MAKIN YA VERSE SOUND DUMB AND NOT GOOD,U HAD PUNCHES BUT WITH THAT STRUTURE AND WITH NO FLOW IT MADE IT SOUND DUMB


I HAVE TO GO WITH SABOTAGE-BASICALLY HE HAD GOOD "OK" FLOW AND STRUTURE DA PUNCHES WERE PLAYED BUT "OK"

FRIEN-MASTER-DA ONLY REASON I DIDNT PICK U CAUSE DA STRUTURE WAS MESSED UP,MAKING YA FLOW WACK,AND YA PUNCHES SOUND DUMB,AND YA WHOLE VERSE SOUND DUMB

WORK ON STRUTURE
LENGHT YA LINEZ

AND HOMIE U GOING SOMEWHERE AFTER U ACHIEVE DEM 2 GOALS

...................WORD

frein-ma$ter 10-27-04 09:37 PM

i dont care no mre.............upppppinnnnnnnn!!!!

Critic 10-28-04 05:53 PM

This was feedback posted for frein-ma$ter
 
Just peeping this battle...

Sik Wit It 10-30-04 05:03 AM

Voted For: frein-ma$ter

frein-ma$ter
..Like rough sex when i poke his ass-is-ruined ...shove my fist through his gums make him hand-me-his-chewins... ,this pansy-is-ruined.. cause prem a ‘cut his chest‘, and (leave sabotage showing more heart) than a Family Reunion[b]//
^NICE OPNER
...Trample-his-doings, he better duck when the free-mag-blows-him...or else the clip a leave his [b](health broke down) like rehab programs...his knee-scabs-open, when i shoot-this-zero...When i pull, it’ll leave sabotage (covering his face more times) than a super hero//
^NICE PUNCH HEA…
..Boot this queer~o, and get schooled when this dude’s majoring.. cause My verse Puts (Dyn in his place) more times than food catering...|new hater stings, come at request as soon as my foe’s need...Prem sharp, the knife a leave (blood leaking out ya face) like a fucking nose bleed//
^DECENT PUNCH…RIGHT HEA
...‘Close reads’, prem ‘ends chapters’ and haze his glaze...daze his wayz...like sneaking into a (retard’s racist movement)...Sab only accepted posed as Krazy K’s //
^ANOTHA NICE PUNCH
...Aint no breakin this don.. after battle his speech shakin and drawn...(Sabotage winning?) I leave this bitch (holding his mouth) like he’s taken a yawn//
^NICE CLOSER

sabotage
you a newb to this site so I don’t wanna hurt you little buddy
frein-master reminds me of homosexual comics…..so gay its funny
^AN ‘OKAY’ OPNER…
don’t know the difference between 10 lines and 5 bars kid go to hell
aint nobody feelin your sh!t except that dude from jail
^DECENT PUNCH HEA…
in other words u get your fudge packed ya whole flows pre written
ima make this ‘fool vanish’ like ‘retarded magicians’
^DECENT PUNCH
you only got 12 posts so ur chance to win is lessened
he runs his head into ‘english books’ in order to claim he got ‘sentenced’
^AN ‘OKAY’ CLOSER


Overall
frein took this one hea…
had harder complex-punches
and they connected…even tho
his structure was stretch’d like hell
he still gets my vote hea…

frein-ma$ter 10-30-04 04:40 PM

4-3...............thanks for votin....upppppin!!!!


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