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Voted For: warrior

*murkage*: ummm....1st bar was a self-glorification line and not a good starter completely wack. 2nd bar was not all that great not really feeling the gun lines at all. 3rd= decent. 4th bar was like ummm.... a filler not great pretty played at all points both lines....overall: 3/10 blah i'm harsh what can i say

warrior: 1st bar was ish...nah mean pretty played changing peeps name like that atleast. 2nd= was whack as hell i don't want to be rude or anything i'm just saying it as it is. 3rd bar ummm....was probably your best line i was liking it a bit....final was ummm filler like...overall: 5/10

vote: warrior

Voted For: *murkage*

murkage gets my vote for more punchlines and a better vocabulary. keep elevating warrior and up your vocabulary and maybe you will be worth something.NO HATE.just an honest vote.return tha favor.
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Voted For: warrior

Breakdown.
murkage:
fags like you get shitted on by the Supreme Ballers
Ima Playa hata got more head than abes face on $20 dollars
^weak opener, very played and unoriginal.
Yo warrior wil get Shell shocked-Aim locked-Gonna get his Dome rocked
soon as you step out side-you hear me fully fledged shotgun get cocked
^ ok second line, no personal or hard punch, just a filler line.
Lyrically beat ya wit any instrument available-includin my shoe-
Bitch no one could smell ya flows even if u brought the canines thru
^this bar was probly the best in your verse but still weak.
your finnished-your done with uve been lyrikly injected with flu
this is just a taste of me-no wonder yo mam rejected you***
^shit closer, weak, played and unoriginal.
murkage work on your punches and try to work on throwing personals in your verse.

warrior:
battlein me herbs-get-scared ill rip ya words-apart/
dis lame needs to fix his name......and change "murk"-to-"garb"/(garbage)
^good opener, nice personal, not too original of a concept but it works.

murkage-is-a-homo im hurtin-kids-wit-no-hope/
u prolly had a betta chance of winnin if u no-showed/
^lol this line made me line, good punch but the second line has been used often but its still really dope.
see now im talkin crazy cause frankly u had no chance-at-all/
cause i could smell "defeat" in the air like u standin on ya hands-to-walk/
^weakest line in your verse but decent nonetheless.
dis mans-all-talk and if he said somtin hot i prolly said-it-before/
dis battles ova cause "age" aint meet the requirements to be ready-for-"war"/
^Good punch and closer your verse was definatly better.

Overall warrior takes this for having a better solid verse.murkage you know what you need to work on and I hope you will achieve thatin the future.

V/Warrior.
return the fav.

Voted For: warrior

battlein me herbs-get-scared ill rip ya words-apart/
dis lame needs to fix his name......and change "murk"-to-"garb"/(garbage)
^^^^^^^^^^^ O AIGHT NICE WORDPLAY GOOD PUNCH

murkage-is-a-homo im hurtin-kids-wit-no-hope/
u prolly had a betta chance of winnin if u no-showed/
^^^^^^^^^^^^^ OK PUNCH DONT STRETCH CHA LINES THAT MUCH


see now im talkin crazy cause frankly u had no chance-at-all/
cause i could smell "defeat" in the air like u standin on ya hands-to-walk/
^^^^^^^^^^^^ ALRIGHT GOOD PUNCH CREATIVITY THERE


dis mans-all-talk and if he said somtin hot i prolly said-it-before/
dis battles ova cause "age" aint meet the requirements to be ready-for-"war"/
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^ AIIIIGHT NICE CLOSA GOOD PUNCH



WARRIOR- U HAD AN GOOD VERSE NICE PUNCHES WORDPLAYS AND WORK ON YA FLOW MAYNE


fags like you get shitted on by the Supreme Ballers
Ima Playa hata got more head than abes face on $20 dollars
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^ EH DOESNT MAKE SENSE

Yo warrior wil get Shell shocked-Aim locked-Gonna get his Dome rocked
soon as you step out side-you hear me fully fledged shotgun get cocked
^^^^^^^^^^^ TOO BASIC AND PLAYED


Lyrically beat ya wit any instrument available-includin my shoe-
Bitch no one could smell ya flows even if u brought the canines thru
^^^^^^^^^^^^ PUNCH 'OK' FLOW


your finnished-your done with uve been lyrikly injected with flu
this is just a taste of me-no wonder yo mam rejected you***
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^ EH NOT AN GOOD CLOSA


MURKAGE- "OK" YA VERSE WAS TOO BASIC NOT AN GOOD PUNCHES "OK" FLOW BUT CHA PUNCHES KINDA LACKED AND BAISC

OVERALL= WARRIOR GETS MY VOTE CAUSE OF HARDER PUNCHES AND FLOW

WARRIOR- HAD PUNCHES AND FLOW DA PUNCHES JUST EDGE DA BATTLE TO GET MY VOTE PLUS DA WORDPLAY


MURKAGE- YA VERSE KINDA LACKED NOT AN GOOD ONE WORK ON CREATING MORE PUNCHES MAKE DEM HARDER USE PERSONALS AND WORDPLAY