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Kawn Flixx 01-13-05 04:28 PM

Yo Seriously,I told everyone no freestyles here,and it keps coming

here's the rap you dropped

cats on this board have trash desires and flash fires// that don't burn yet you won't turn// to my post. chump niwtit with no funk benefits// in rap your brains and mainframes are designed for pissing only. you wear fabrics slick but just rabbits trixs// and your rhymes for the birds bitches got minds of nerds// I'm mean and unique with extreme heat yall bitches soft like cream of wheat// hey fakes pass me a plate hell i'm hungry and lonely

Now copy and paste that and post it elsewhere and save it,I wouldn't waste your rap like that seriously.
I appreciate you being active,its just freestyle om's are not allowed anymore

MADDRAPPER 01-13-05 04:40 PM

Already Have But You Can't Copy And Paste Your Name On The Book Of Life Read Revelation Very Interesting Son

Kawn Flixx 01-13-05 04:48 PM

Quit freeposting NOW!!!!

flow2crazy 01-13-05 05:40 PM

This was some deep shit... i could tell by the way u wrote it... your rhyming was pretty good but some of it could use some work... lines werent really stretched all in all id say it was really good because of the emotion in it...9/10

Drop some feed on my new open mic... its called The New Testamin n im just about 2 go post it...

~Stay up Fam~
~Flow2crazy~

Kawn Flixx 01-15-05 02:03 AM

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DQ 01-15-05 08:55 AM

Okay, this is one of the best drops I've read here so far...It all came straight from the core, the emotion was so raw and deep. The vocab you used was suited for this, not too many big-shot words, kept it nice and to the point. The hook was hot but the emotion...can't get over it...just how real this was...many can relate to what you have written and even if they don't, it doesn't take a genius to see this is d-o-p-e and straight from the heart...

Props to you! This should go in Hall Of Fame people!

DQ

Kawn Flixx 01-15-05 02:42 PM

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distilled 01-15-05 09:03 PM

Indeph Foo', I don't even know what To Say To This one.

I read it a while back, and i was just like speechless.

Mo Fucka, too dope.

Bitch. :thumbup:

Kawn Flixx 01-16-05 01:39 PM

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Kawn Flixx 01-16-05 09:21 PM

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Logic The Goonie 01-17-05 02:56 AM

iight first off imma say I don't know what this was intended as becuas ethere were a lot of parts where you rhymed and others where you didnt. So it might be a poem or something along those lines. But the flow was choppy sometimes, it felt like you were trying to make all the emotion substitute for the lack of flow, which aint gunna work in a real song.

Anyways, the emotion was nice in it, basically the main aspect, but it kinda jumped around a bit too much. I want this to be a story that goes on while the reader is going cuz its was just too jumpy. The chorus or w/e was whack, I won't lie, work on that. Work on the low cuz no matter what you do thats what rap is gunna be about in the end.

I give it like 6.5/10

Hit this up and don't get butthurt:
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=172478


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