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This was feedback posted for final
 

(since i dont have 700 posts....my vote is not official.....lol)

my "unofficial vote" goes to final.

basically.......you stayed on point bruh. para came tight too, however he drifted off of the topical that he had specifically set up....lol. so, going by the official rules of this match, final succeeds.

final...
your verse was dope. there were nice descriptions and alot of emotion in your drop. i was able to visualize the ruins you described with ease. your structure was cool and you had decent vocab as well. the only advice that i could give you....work on the flow a little bit. it seemed as though a few of your lines were forced, but other than that.......nice job homie. you got down.

para...
you had a sick verse as well. its too bad that you switched up the direction of the topical......that was what hurt you here. if anything, next time....leave the topic simple so that way you can play with it some more. your structure was damn near flawless and i liked your vocab. you had a clean steady flow throughout the verse.....so thats a plus. some of your lines were pretty funny, (haha) nice.....nice. i noticed in a few places that you hardly rhymed, try working on that some next time.

keep up the good work fellas. please return the favor.

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thank you. oner...


s.v.

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Voted For: final

Alrite nice battle

Final-

Nice verse not ya best but was still gud, felt a degree of emotion in this one and some gud descriptive writtin which i personally like alot in a topical, flow was gud in most parts, but stook to the topic well and had some nice vocab

parrallel-
O.k nice verse dawg, like ya sed different style to wot wud have been expected with this title which can be a gud thing but on this occasion i feel it went against ya, ya flow was perfect but i felt ur storyline was slightly off topic although original n felt ya cud have upped ya vocab slightly, but still nice


this was very close cos i've seen both come alot beta, but final sneeks this

pz