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Voted For: MiSta_AuTh3nTiQ
Tears coming down my eyes, as I quickly change personality My own girlfriend pointing a gun at my head, hand is shaking furiously I’ve broken her heart in pieces, like an rose has lost beautiful pedals I’ve split her heart in 2 like sandals, I treated her dirty not like an gold medal On my knees, my lungs are like an vibrator, shaking. I was in a havoc of fear Thinking, if she pull the trigger, everything I done when I was alive, will disappear Her eyes red, she was angry, furious, like the devil. If I’d talked she would turn into Satan I hit her, more times than Roy Jones, been hitting a boxer. As I rethink, I felt so ashamed I put my hands together, started saying words, I felt like I was talking in foreign language I was praying, telling god to forgive my sins, begging for my life, I didn’t want my brain, a spinach I started saying “sorry”, though that will not help, she has so much hatred on me, deep in her layers She puts the gun in my mouth, like a dick. My lips quivering, she looked me in the eye, Your last prayers? . . .thats a nice fucking verse mista...really feeling the vivd picture you painted on this, and i dont do topicals so thats really saying something your last line was felt man, bout to say RIP mista authentiq! . . when i roll out wit tha crew, i know my return may be denied i dont wanna know that my girl cried, cuz her siolder died so i put my hands together and i look towards tha sky and pray to tha lord that on this day i do not die 'dear lord if you choose to lay my soul to rest on this day i shall accept my fait, but please dont take my life away' 'i need just one more day, to say what i gotta say, to my brother i gotta tell my girl i love her, and show love to my mother' im not afraid of death, you cant take my life if you please im just askin fo a day, before my ashes are blowin in tha breeze this is my final prayer, a plee for life ima need the hand of god... to remove this knife..... . . this was good too, but in a more direct and simply put way nice verse with this but compared to the above it lacks real emotion . .gotta v/ mista authentiq . http://community.rapverse.com/showb...ad.php?t=177392 http://community.rapverse.com/showb...ad.php?t=178800 please return the favor |
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Voted For: Tha Sickness
close battle ...ya know even though you can't spell i liked your a lil more than mista in the aspect of last prayer i thought you actually stuck with it .. it was pretty ill and i jus thought yours had more heart in it...' rhyme style//Tg heart//TG structure//mista wordplay//mista overall end effect//tg close but i gotta go with Tha Godfatha nice drop on both sides |
Voted For: Tha Sickness
Not the best topical battle i ever saw, both need some elevation... Godfather, work on ya vocab, an creativity, but you had more emotion in this peice...than mistah did Voab let u down, an you could have been a little more creative, but your emotion shined over all of that, an gets u my vote Mistah, your peice was aight, expected better from you, an some of your stuff was way too strecthed, ya was more creative with your ideas, just gotta word them better No hate, an return the fave Peace out |
Wow! You Dont Know Shit About Topicals Do You?
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well well well it looks like im winning .... uppin
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Shut You Ass Up......................"i'm Winning" Yes You Are By D/r'z.........
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Voted For: MiSta_AuTh3nTiQ
mista took this one imo.......he basically took this one because his imagery was a lot better than sicks..... mista-your verse had nice vocab u can tell meanin was put into dis....u needed to stay on topic a lil more but you still made up for it in other areas.....it had more religion to it then just a prayer which i liked...... sickness-yours was kinda boring..didnt catch my eyes a lot....u need to put some more vocab into your verse....it looked like you just keyed that wit out thinkin what u waz doin....i couldnt really picture what u was sayin like i could mistas.......1 |
why is it everytime i get a vote you bitch and moan about it bein a d/r .. just accept the fact that people actually feel what im spittin.. peace out bi-atch
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Voted For: MiSta_AuTh3nTiQ
Here is why I am voting for Authentiq. The creativity on this was more present, it was him and his last prayers, on a topic that hasn't honestly been that discussed that much. Where as, Tha Sick One, pretty much took the "gangstuh" way out, for creativity wise, it just wasn't as applicable. Also the grammar, used in Authentiq's really outdid Tha Sick One. When you have larger grammar you look much better, and smarter, and show that you have a larger brain capacity. Although Tha Sick One's piece, did flow better. |
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Voted For: MiSta_AuTh3nTiQ
wow...easy win imo this wasnt even close emotion-mista tha sickness you actually had good emotion in your piece...i felt it there a lot but mistas was more deep because of the words he used to describe shit so he got the edge in this aspect imagery-mista definately...basically described how shit looked a lot better then sickness...good words showing what he was saying you did good here... beginning/end-mista this is the easiest aspect mista won...sickness, when you said the soldier line i was like wtf? where did that come from...you didnt give no backround information and it felt like the whole intro was left out...and the ending was horrible really played out and the whole verse was just like mediocre...no vocab...if he got votes thats amazing d/r, mista you had a really good ending i thought and the beginning had good imagery so i liked that overall no hate to you sickness but mista won easily...good luck to both peace |
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