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checkin polls cos i'll probably *never* have 300 posts

Blah, uppin' this again for some more votes people.

Uppin' again, honest explained votes will be returned. I know people who haven't voted yet won't see that, but oh well lol.

Blah, vote on this...uppin' again kids quit sleeping.

Voted For: MC Firetruck

wow mc firetrizzle gets this.. hot punches the whole way thru.. nice flow by both, structure was tied.. personals go to mc and punches go to mc, affinity you verse mad absolutely no sense. your punchs just werent hitting, and honestly your not on mc firetrizzles level, and when i look in ur sig and it says your beating him.. that makes me think there is mad DR goin on.. cause u got ripped. MC FireTrizzle reminds me some what of 9th Degree... they got similar styles :thumbup:

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This was feedback posted for MC Firetruck
 

Nice Battle............................................ ...

Been sleeping on this for a while, but I'm uppin' this again...vote! lol.

This was feedback posted for Affinity
 

Fucking wack you fucking cunt. You are wack go suck a testicle, bitch.

word

affinity.....alot of your stuff was really basic, like, you have some good ideas, but your wordplay isn't that great, and you need to elevate your vocab too....and think your punches out more so they will come across harder and more effective.......and try to get more creative..
U aint Extraordinary, so stop thinkin ur the village chef
I don’t care bout ur belief, if ur Christian, ill bite the beef
^ to be honest, i don't know what that was suppose to do, i never knew village chiefs were extraordinary?....but, you really need to word things better, up vocab, get more creative and complex with your punches.........you had a good line, the sky's peak one, but that was it, everything else was kinda whack....

mcF....decent punches.......i think your personals were what won it alone....structure flow, nothing wrong.....nothing speical with wordplay.....i thought two lines won this for you......
An affinity's an obsession, and I'll explain the definition
"His affinity for dickriders won him our last competition"
That's it, you're gettin' smoked, I'm the boy with the cig
And the only buzz you got in hip hop, is that toy in your sig
^ word, those personals hit pretty good, i thought anyways, best lines.......uh, thought that motorized weed killer line was dumb......but overall, this was an easy battle to decide.....you took this one.....but it wasn't your best.....keep up

v/mcfiretruck

Voted For: MC Firetruck

Mc firetruck prolly could be the fireman of the fire hall
But who cares if he prefers hose on trucks den on a doll
^^DECENT OPENER, GOT A CHUCKLE
U no mc, u on the wrong degree, cuz u only in grade one
Don’t u get more dizzy den microwaves spinin den a gun
^^WASNT FEELING THIS PUNCH
U aint Extraordinary, so stop thinkin ur the village chef
I don’t care bout ur belief, if ur Christian, ill bite the beef
^^DECENT,..GOOD FLOW,NOT HARD HITTING THOUGH
Whats wit the prophecy, watch as I add L’s to ur technique
My punch will make ur eye turn blue to match the skys peak
^^WASNT FEELING THIS
Possibly u might have wisdom, claiming to be an old man
I’ll put holes to ur winnin streak as I rewrite ur verses plan
^^NO PUNCH..WEAK CLOSER..
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overall ya verse was bout average, i didnt see much other then your opener that caught my eye...your punches just werent connecting..you started decent but ya verse fell off
the rest the way through ..........pz

You are who you associate with, so stay out my vicinity
'Cuz I'm not usually on that bitch shit, but my verse is about Affinity
^^THIS OPENER WAS A FLIPPED CONCEPT FROM B4..LOL,NAH
WASNT REALLY FEELING IT CUZ OF THAT..SRRY
Are you kiddin' me? Does this herb know the meaning of that phrase?
Oh well, he also thought Parallel meant "going seperate ways"
^^THIS WAS NICE...
An affinity's an obsession, and I'll explain the definition
"His affinity for dickriders won him our last competition"
^^OK,....DECENT
You don't believe me? I'll get the link, we'll see who be iller
'Cuz for real, you're whacker than a motorized weed killer
^^AGAIN, THIS WAS DECENT
That's it, you're gettin' smoked, I'm the boy with the cig
And the only buzz you got in hip hop, is that toy in your sig
^^GOOD CLOSER
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overall bar for bar this verse hads stronger punches and was more consistent..nothin to special, but i was definately feeling ya concepts more so than the other verse.......
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affinity..work on ya punches...
mc...t,..try not to flip ya old concepts.......pz

Voted For: MC Firetruck

mc got this one...the battle WAS kinda close thoguh

affinity-my favorite line was the 2nd one...i liked some of your punches but the majority of them didnt hit hard enuff and were all plays on hsi name...the structure was nice thoguh,and good flow...coodve had more multies....i also wasnt feeling the opener or closer...

mcfiretruck-loved the closer, the flow was alright, good punches, nice werdplay too...the only things needing improvement were multies, and vocab....i liked this verse

overall-

opener-MC
closer-MC
flow-A
vocab-A
puncehs-MC

i actually thoguh this was a nice battle

v/mc firetruck

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I be uppin' dis, yo. Time for me to beat BitchFace here lmao:laugh:

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Yo MC FireTruck Got Diz EZ.........................

Voted For: MC Firetruck

...............v/ mc...........firetruck..........