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Voted For: MaRVJay1009

marvjay1009
ya'll think dis kids a crook? naw..cant keystyle gotta get ya book awww
ya lines is "candy" ppl dont reply cuzz u suck they dont "MiSS Da GOOD BaR"
^^^ NICE OPENER
i hope u gota crew fam go get wun of ya boys da come try me
i dont mean da "leaf" if orion live i'll go 2 da hospital & "poison" his "iV"
^^^ IIGHT PUNCH
i aint with games young im grown..ya moms i dont luvin da bone
so now when i call her its "4-HEaD" like da "front of ya dome"
^^^MEH
ya bars they weaka..trust me i got thugs dat a pome they heata's
clap at ya legs & leave ya "CaVS" in ya "lebron james sneaker's"
^^HA PRETTY THOUGHTFUL
ur a net mc...u'll be on here by da time im earnin millions...
ya cd hott? no u couldn't "PUT OUT FiRE" runnin up in a "burnin buildin"
^^IIGHT CLOSUE-PRETTY AVERAGE THOUGH

i liked sum of ur punches
pretty decent verse
structure was nice
elevate sum more though
8/10


ORION
You have no presence... but you're in awe of my charisma…
I'll dispose of every Key you have and treat you like a prisoner…
^^ ALRIGHT OPENER
This shit's a synch I don't flinch, specially in front of this fagget-ass-bitch…
Eh Put ya Money where ya Mouth is, so me-n-my bat can 'Strike Rich'…
^^ATTEMPTED PUNCH
Coming up in NYC? Looking For Rep? might as well call me ur idol…
'Fag', 'Slut', 'Bitch', 'Cunt'.... u have the RIGHT to all Those Titles...
^^^PLAYED LINE
tha loser’s circle’s the tool shed, so im putting this hoe in his place…
no skills to embrace, this fag’s a disgrace to the established race…*
^^NICE LINE
I strike like a Nazi blitzkrieg, bark rhymes in German while dissectin' this feeble Jew
But I refuse to make fun of his spelling - cuz evinn disslecksikxs arr teople poo
^^LIKE DA CLOSURE PRETTY THOUGHFUL AND CLEVER

nice punches
sum of dem didnt land though
nice structure
clever word usage
work on elevatin a little more
7/10
no hate

my v/marvjay1009

check out my battle vs.thekid523 yall no 1 iz votin
please holla back wit good feedback and a vote 4 who u think won

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Voted For: MaRVJay1009

dope battle.....
seems like marv the street nigga with the street flow vs orions interlectual spits...

Orion had better vocab, flow wasnt AS good, but iut still cant be faulted i guess, not as strong punchlines as marv had, somewhat witty, the jew line was prety damn sick, that was the highlight of your verse Orion, but for overral consistancy within the verse it had ta be Marv, he came with humour an hard consistant punches, the style n aspect of his whole verse is more suited to my style, so that kinda swayed my vote also....not much i can fault from either, marv had the more consistancy an fluency about his verse, so he gets my vote

could yall RTF?
Peace.